Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
According to author, Pirouettes Ballet School is the best choice for any children who want to learn Dance. Because they have very intensive program and their teachers have danced in the most prestigious school results they have a lot more experienced teachers and also the student from this school has been selected to top dance companies. So this should be best choice for any child however all the recommendation seems credulous on the first glance but author needs to consider or answer to some more question to reach the conclusion.
First of all, How many students get selected to big companies, we have no such data and author must have to provide to reach such conclusion. For example: there are 100 students in the batch but only 30-40 students are selected However there might be some other school who have only 30-40 students in the batch and gets all selected, then we can’t say this is the best school for the child rather we need information on which it is based. Thus without getting detailed information we can’t consider this school as the clear choice for the child.
In addition to it, authors has mentioned the school have most intensive program however not mentioned the cost for each and every program. For example there is likely the chance of programs which are more costly than the same programs of others school. There might be the chances of programs which might be intensive but requires a lot money to be paid for it although we could get the same program from other school of dancing paying less. Thus author has to provide the answer for question, how much cost of program and whether it is worth of buying?
Also, author has mentioned the faculties are danced in most prestigious companies all our the world but author has not provided the rating or feedback from student whether they teach properly or else focus on students who are already champ or need small assistance to get through. For example there might be the chance in which teachers are already inclined to the students who need less efforts and learns quickly however the student who are naïve or new to this school might not be happy with the teachers contribution. Thus students feel humiliated and might end up with leaving the school or even the dancing as well.
Therefore author needs to sort out, all the answer of questions above before reaching to the conclusion.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 411 350
No. of Characters: 1931 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.503 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.698 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.301 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.357 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.039 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.929 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.376 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.629 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.16 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 101, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to dance'
Suggestion: To dance
...oice for any children who want to learn Dance. Because they have very intensive progr...
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Line 1, column 356, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'be the best'.
Suggestion: be the best
... to top dance companies. So this should be best choice for any child however all the re...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 359, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'bested', 'welled'?
Suggestion: bested; welled
... top dance companies. So this should be best choice for any child however all the re...
^^^^
Line 1, column 432, Rule ID: ON_FIRST_GLANCE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'at'?
Suggestion: at
... all the recommendation seems credulous on the first glance but author needs to co...
^^
Line 2, column 444, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... need information on which it is based. Thus without getting detailed information we...
^^^^
Line 4, column 383, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun efforts is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ready inclined to the students who need less efforts and learns quickly however the ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 435, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... and learns quickly however the student who are naïve or new to this school might not b...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 499, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...this school might not be happy with the teachers contribution. Thus students feel humili...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 522, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...e happy with the teachers contribution. Thus students feel humiliated and might end ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...he school or even the dancing as well. Therefore author needs to sort out, all the answe...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, so, then, therefore, thus, well, as to, for example, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1973.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 411.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.800486618 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38374785467 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.440389294404 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 577.8 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.9555677165 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.928571429 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3571428571 23.324526521 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.70786347227 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400198079102 0.218282227539 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141374936858 0.0743258471296 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730480705569 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210836031428 0.128457276422 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111748988633 0.0628817314937 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 48.3550499002 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 12.197005988 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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