The argument is concluding that pirouettes ballet school has got the best qualifications among all other dance schools to be the first choice of every child who aspires to be a dancer. though the argument is stating some logical and probable facts, it is relying on many hidden assumptions that could be wrong. it assumes that like every child's first choice will be Pirouettes ballet school, every child's first choice will be to become a ballet dancer. it also assumes that a part of successful students can define the success of every student learning ballet in their school. therefore, it should be evaluated further.
Firstly, the argument fails to provide any justification that how a proportion of students could define the success of all the students out there. there are some precocious children everywhere who works in their respective fields in an outstanding manner.they are going to learn dance i any way, as they are already good at it in some way. but there are most of the students in a field who just want to learn that talent as a hobby or through some kind of motivation. those children hold the true hardships for the teachers to work upon. therefore, the school should give a well evaluated information about there teachers to cope with every children and should inform about every children's growth rate on the basis of their previous knowledge about it.
Secondly, the argument also leaves many unanswered questions. it does not present any logical information about its assumption of thinking that every other dance school is going to teach their students ballet only. there are various types of dance forms prevailing and it is feasible to think that every other dance school is going to be best in different types of dance forms. Dance is an eclectic art form which goes from classical to pop, jazz to salsa. and every other form is one of its best . ballet is not going to be the only choice for students.
Finally, even if the pirouettes ballet school is really good in teaching to ballet children, the argument is till lacking because it does not provide any information regarding its fees structure and time schedules. children are going to have their school timing at morning and their should be feasible time slot of dace class so that it will not put extra pressure on them. also, financial terms should clear with parents as it is not important that each parent is going to have good financial condition and they will not care about whatever the cost be. besides, there can be certain dance schools with low budget and comparatively good ratings.
Because the argument makes several unwarranted assumptions, it fails to make a convincing recommendation because of lack of statistical data and proper reasoning. The argument ends with an unrealistic optimistic conclusion based on tenuous observations that is likely to be incorrect. However, if the author has answered the above questions clearly, his or her recommendation would have been more convincing.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 502 350
No. of Characters: 2446 1500
No. of Different Words: 228 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.733 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.873 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.597 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 45.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 27.858 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.38 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.688 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.133 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 186, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Though
...every child who aspires to be a dancer. though the argument is stating some logical an...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 312, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...hidden assumptions that could be wrong. it assumes that like every childs first ch...
^^
Line 1, column 454, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...oice will be to become a ballet dancer. it also assumes that a part of successful ...
^^
Line 1, column 578, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...tudent learning ballet in their school. therefore, it should be evaluated further. Fir...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 148, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
... success of all the students out there. there are some precocious children everywhere...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 231, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an outstanding manner" with adverb for "outstanding"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...re who works in their respective fields in an outstanding manner.they are going to learn dance i any way...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...hey are already good at it in some way. but there are most of the students in a fie...
^^^
Line 3, column 469, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Those
...bby or through some kind of motivation. those children hold the true hardships for th...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 539, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...ardships for the teachers to work upon. therefore, the school should give a well evaluate...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 63, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... also leaves many unanswered questions. it does not present any logical informatio...
^^
Line 5, column 216, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...ng to teach their students ballet only. there are various types of dance forms prevai...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 458, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...s from classical to pop, jazz to salsa. and every other form is one of its best . b...
^^^
Line 5, column 497, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... and every other form is one of its best . ballet is not going to be the only choi...
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Line 5, column 500, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Ballet
...d every other form is one of its best . ballet is not going to be the only choice for ...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 22, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'pirouettes'' or 'pirouette's'?
Suggestion: pirouettes'; pirouette's
...e for students. Finally, even if the pirouettes ballet school is really good in teachin...
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Line 7, column 216, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Children
... its fees structure and time schedules. children are going to have their school timing a...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 375, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...it will not put extra pressure on them. also, financial terms should clear with pare...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2497.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 502.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97410358566 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64976903201 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47609561753 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 763.2 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5998124291 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.565217391 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8260869565 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.34782608696 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272091921566 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767035054955 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662051195353 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142236104371 0.128457276422 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0717662100849 0.0628817314937 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.