In order to increase the application and enrollment, the president of Grove College make a suggestion that they should abandon the tradition of all=female education and admit male students as some others all-female colleges have done. And the director of the aluminae association dispute that the tradition is so essential to identify the college, and cites two surveys of some students and aluminae to support his stance. However, both the suggestion and the disputing view remain unpersuasive due to some implicit qustions.
Fisrtly, the two surveys cited by the director are too vague in the details to be valid.
Taking the first survey on the incoming students' opinions as example, it is suspicious to only ask those students who haven't started their life in the college, while ignoring those in higher grades that might give a different answer. Besides, it's natural to believe those incoming students chose Grove College for the tradition, but we can't exclude the possibility that more prospective students avoid the college for the tradition. In these cases, a survey only involve the incoming students does not make sense.
As for the second survey, the same question remains that whether the opinion of those respondents are representative or not. After all, it is told only a majority of respondents, not of all alumnae, are objecting the plan. Perhaps even more proponent of the president have no chance to make a respondence due to the deliberate selection of survey sample. If that is the case, the conclusion of the survey are ramshackle. And another crucial question of the survey is that whether the opinion of these aluminae is important or helpful to the development of the college. Maybe the opinions of falculty members, teachers and parents who might or might not be willing to send their children to the college are also important.
All these quesions of the two surveys render the director's objection to the recommendation weak and unpersuasive. But on the other hand, the president is too hasty or incogent to make the recommendation because of a lack of more information other than that of these colleges mentioned. There might be other indespensible factors of the success in breaking with the all-female tradition, such as the widespread reports in newspapers and TV that their spurning the entrenched tradition, which make these colleges even more famous and welcome. Or perhaps their presidents decided to provide more scholarship available to counter the risk of their change of course. We don't know whether the Grove College can share the same advantages with those precursors. And even if that is true, we can't still believe without reservation that the co-educational mode will increase the application and enrollment, because an increase in applications dosen't amount to an increase in enrollment. These questions are indeed tricky to deal with.
Simply from the information given in the argument, we have to raise a lot of questions regarding to the design of the two surveys, the comparability between the Grove College and the colleges mentioned and the risk of accepting the recommendation.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: And the director of the aluminae association dispute that the tradition is so essential to identify the college, and cites two surveys of some students and aluminae to support his stance.
Error: stance Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: aluminae Suggestion: alumnae
Sentence: However, both the suggestion and the disputing view remain unpersuasive due to some implicit qustions.
Error: unpersuasive Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: qustions Suggestion: questions
Sentence: Perhaps even more proponent of the president have no chance to make a respondence due to the deliberate selection of survey sample.
Error: respondence Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: If that is the case, the conclusion of the survey are ramshackle.
Error: ramshackle Suggestion: shackle
Sentence: And another crucial question of the survey is that whether the opinion of these aluminae is important or helpful to the development of the college.
Error: aluminae Suggestion: alumnae
Sentence: Maybe the opinions of falculty members, teachers and parents who might or might not be willing to send their children to the college are also important.
Error: falculty Suggestion: faculty
Sentence: All these quesions of the two surveys render the director's objection to the recommendation weak and unpersuasive.
Error: unpersuasive Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: quesions Suggestion: questions
Sentence: But on the other hand, the president is too hasty or incogent to make the recommendation because of a lack of more information other than that of these colleges mentioned.
Error: incogent Suggestion: incident
Sentence: There might be other indespensible factors of the success in breaking with the all-female tradition, such as the widespread reports in newspapers and TV that their spurning the entrenched tradition, which make these colleges even more famous and welcome.
Error: indespensible Suggestion: indispensable
Error: all-female Suggestion: all female
Sentence: And even if that is true, we can't still believe without reservation that the co-educational mode will increase the application and enrollment, because an increase in applications dosen't amount to an increase in enrollment.
Error: co-educational Suggestion: coeducation
Error: dosen Suggestion: dose
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 512 350
No. of Characters: 2578 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.757 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.035 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.823 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 189 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 160 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 107 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.381 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.776 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.292 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.535 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 119, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...spicious to only ask those students who havent started their life in the college, whil...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 337, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...Grove College for the tradition, but we cant exclude the possibility that more prosp...
^^^^
Line 9, column 50, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'directors'' or 'director's'?
Suggestion: directors'; director's
... quesions of the two surveys render the directors objection to the recommendation weak an...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 666, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... the risk of their change of course. We dont know whether the Grove College can shar...
^^^^
Line 9, column 784, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...recursors. And even if that is true, we cant still believe without reservation that ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, still, while, after all, as for, of course, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 11.1786427146 197% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2636.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 508.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18897637795 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89808174449 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470472440945 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 838.8 705.55239521 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4323670344 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.523809524 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1904761905 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292095869588 0.218282227539 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778938606665 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111121057844 0.0701772020484 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138828726366 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103722750677 0.0628817314937 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 98.500998004 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.