Prompt: “The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.”
Assignment: Discuss how well-reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion, be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.
While the author may have a legitimate concern towards the influx of illegal immigrants and the resultant security threat towards the nation, the argument placed forth has a lack of solid data and evidence which makes the author's argument difficult to evaluate. The argument also fails to mention viable options to strengthen the border along with their financial effectiveness during implementation and fails to account for any extraneous factors which may be at play exacerbating this issue. At the same time, the author fails to account for the ways in which the economy and national identity are endangered, which affects the weight of the argument. This lack of underlying information and solid data, along with assumptions which are rather weak, unconvincing and have several flaws in them, bring about a demand for a closer, more detailed examination.
Firstly, although the author has mentioned that the borders need to be strengthened, there is no inclusion of the different ways by which the same can be implemented. There have been steps which are provided in the argument which claim to improve the border security. Additionally, no mention of financial expenses involved in such an undertaking has been provided. Perhaps, the country in question has much more serious issues at hand and could instead invest the proposed sum of money towards the eradication fo those issues. Without a clear description of the steps to improve security and the expenses, it difficult to make any kind of assumptions and hence the author's argument fails to deliver.
Perhaps the borders are already secure enough and the issue of illegal immigration could be a result of lax enforcing of government-issued visas. It is highly plausible that the immigrants could have entered the country through legal means by acquiring a visa and have exceeded the length of their designated stay, thus becoming an illegal immigrant. Hence, the author must analyze all of the different cases which bring about this issue and pinpointing the issue to be a result of weak borders is not the only way to go.
Furthermore, another glaring assumption that the author readily makes is that the illegal immigrants pose a threat to the economy and identity of the nation without citing reasons for the same. It can also be possible that the immigrants are actually contributing to the economy of the nation by being employed, stimulating the economy and hence paying their taxes. For example, if the country consists of a large ageing population and a young strong workforce is needed to rejuvenate the economy, the immigrants shall actually help add to the workforce and hence strengthen the economy. Hence, the author's argument towards the economy getting disrupted is flawed.
Additionally, the author also makes a reference to efforts to return the immigrants to their country of origin but fails to account for the different issues and their costs with the same. Firstly, when the illegal immigrant has been apprehended, what is the suitable method to ascertain his nationality? Secondly, once the immigrant's country of origin may have been ascertained, what are the different ways by which the immigrant can be deported back and what are the accompanying costs involved? It can be plausible that the costs involved in deporting the immigrant far exceed the benefits of having him as a useful employee in the country. Consequently, deporting these individuals to their country would not be a wise option and must be considered on a case by case basis.
In conclusion, though the author may have a valid concern for the threats as a result of the immigrants, it is due to the lack of concrete evidence and data, that it becomes difficult to evaluate the argument. Also, due to aforementioned reasons and without supporting evidence and examples where other such counties facing the same issue have improved after deporting the immigrants, one is left under the impression that the claim is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence, and hence fails to deliver.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK. need to argue something like: is there a link between the autonomy of any country and the strength of its borders?
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not exactly. we can say something like: maybe some immigrants don't even have a country, like refugees.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 663 350
No. of Characters: 3336 1500
No. of Different Words: 274 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.074 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.032 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.752 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 246 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 196 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 131 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 80 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.826 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.641 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.696 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.575 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 223, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...solid data and evidence which makes the authors argument difficult to evaluate. The arg...
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Line 3, column 667, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...e any kind of assumptions and hence the authors argument fails to deliver. Perhaps t...
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Line 5, column 383, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...migrant. Hence, the author must analyze all of the different cases which bring about this ...
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Line 7, column 600, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ence strengthen the economy. Hence, the authors argument towards the economy getting di...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.6327345309 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 11.1786427146 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 55.5748502994 142% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3410.0 2260.96107784 151% => OK
No of words: 663.0 441.139720559 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14328808446 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.07432619952 4.56307096286 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82666592366 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 204.123752495 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428355957768 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1070.1 705.55239521 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.0876864957 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.260869565 119.503703932 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8260869565 23.324526521 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.34782608696 5.70786347227 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191755864538 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651721346383 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514297628816 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10971338386 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0692997442937 0.0628817314937 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 151.0 98.500998004 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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