A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Moreover, the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families, and a nationwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than they did a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about healthful eating. Therefore, the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable.
The author states that the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be popular and profitable and to cite the evidence he mentions the increased consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants . Moreover , he states that people living there are two -income families and eat fewer home-cooked foods but have an urge for healthy eating . However , The author does not provide convincing evidence, the evidence he provides cannot be related with each other.
To consider the evidence provided by the author , the following questions should be answered .
Firstly , is it only seafood whose consumption has increased? The author does not provide any data of other food’s consumption. It can be the case that in recent five years there has been an increase in all types of food consumption as people eat fewer home cooked foods. A comparative chart showing increased consumption of seafood and decreased consumption of other food would be needed.
Secondly, Is the seafood consumed more by the locals ? the author forgets to mention the type of customer who enjoys seafood. Author does present the evidence of people eating fewer home cooked foods, but has no evidence of whether they like seafood or not.If it is the case that the sea food is consumed more by tourists and visitors and the city is experiencing more tourists .In such cases the evidence presented by author to relate the success of Caption seafood with the eating habit of the locals doesn't seem convincing.
Thirdly , The increased seafood intake does not necessarily means the restaurant specialized in sea food should be popular , the quality of the food , service time , ambience of the restaurant , the price of the food are the various factors that determines the number of consumers , only if the restaurant offers good service at the low price than the previously serving restaurants, then the restaurant could make profit .
In conclusion , the evidence the author presented is insufficient to predict the success of the new restaurant because of the above mentioned question .
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 337 350
No. of Characters: 1692 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.285 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.021 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.632 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.083 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.568 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.409 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.728 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.144 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 63, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be popular...
^^
Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ble and to cite the evidence he mentions the increased consumption of seafood dis...
^^
Line 1, column 226, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...f seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants . Moreover , he states that people living...
^^
Line 1, column 237, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ishes in Bay City restaurants . Moreover , he states that people living there are ...
^^
Line 1, column 367, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...oods but have an urge for healthy eating . However , The author does not provide c...
^^
Line 1, column 377, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ave an urge for healthy eating . However , The author does not provide convincing ...
^^
Line 3, column 48, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ider the evidence provided by the author , the following questions should be answe...
^^
Line 3, column 93, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...e following questions should be answered . Firstly , is it only seafood whose ...
^^
Line 5, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...estions should be answered . Firstly , is it only seafood whose consumption ha...
^^
Line 5, column 99, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed? The author does not provide any data of other food’s consumption. It can be t...
^^
Line 8, column 56, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...e seafood consumed more by the locals ? the author forgets to mention the type of c...
^^^
Line 8, column 258, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...nce of whether they like seafood or not.If it is the case that the sea food is con...
^^
Line 8, column 378, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...d the city is experiencing more tourists .In such cases the evidence presented by ...
^^
Line 8, column 380, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...the city is experiencing more tourists .In such cases the evidence presented by au...
^^
Line 8, column 504, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ood with the eating habit of the locals doesnt seem convincing. Thirdly , The incre...
^^^^^^
Line 10, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ocals doesnt seem convincing. Thirdly , The increased seafood intake does not n...
^^
Line 10, column 61, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'mean'
Suggestion: mean
...sed seafood intake does not necessarily means the restaurant specialized in sea food ...
^^^^^
Line 10, column 123, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...pecialized in sea food should be popular , the quality of the food , service time ...
^^
Line 10, column 149, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...uld be popular , the quality of the food , service time , ambience of the restaura...
^^
Line 10, column 164, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
..., the quality of the food , service time , ambience of the restaurant , the price ...
^^
Line 10, column 193, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ervice time , ambience of the restaurant , the price of the food are the various f...
^^
Line 10, column 281, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... that determines the number of consumers , only if the restaurant offers good serv...
^^
Line 10, column 422, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...s, then the restaurant could make profit . In conclusion , the evidence the au...
^^
Line 12, column 14, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...nt could make profit . In conclusion , the evidence the author presented is in...
^^
Line 12, column 111, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...redict the success of the new restaurant because of the above mentioned question ...
^^
Line 12, column 152, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... because of the above mentioned question .
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, then, third, thirdly, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 335.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22089552239 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74561628202 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50447761194 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 116.867750068 57.8364921388 202% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 134.538461538 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7692307692 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46153846154 5.70786347227 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 26.0 5.25449101796 495% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229203283525 0.218282227539 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941364975344 0.0743258471296 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0925836685695 0.0701772020484 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110297063483 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685763929576 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.