“The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author of the petition sent to the residents of Youngtown states that the Smith Corporation should not be able to develop land that is part of a wildlife preserve. The petition makes many unreliable assumptions about the effects the company will have on the preserve as well as the bird population that brings in tourists. These assumptions vilify the corporation, making it seem like they could only bring harm when it is possible that they could benefit the area.
One of the biggest assumptions within this petition is that the corporation is going to have a rippling effect throughout the preserve, although it is a small portion of land that the corporation will be using to build a small hotel. If the corporation ensures the preservation of the sanctuary, a small hotel could possibly have a positive effect on the community. The petition provides no evidence that the hotel would cause any damage to the sanctuary. Other than the small area that is going to be used for it, it is not apparent that any damage could occur to the wildlife preserve. Without any evidence of the effects of small businesses on nearby wildlife, it is irresponsible to make such claims.
The author of the petition then goes on to state that the community relies on tourists that visit to see the vast bird population. The petition quickly assumes that the small hotel that the corporation plans on building won't benefit the tourists that come to see the bird population. If the community relies on these tourists, a small hotel would give them another place to stay while they are in the area. It is possible that this would lead to an increase in tourists. The increase in tourists will inevitably benefit the economy by increasing the profits brought in by the travelers that the community depends on to flourish.
The petition assumes that the building of this hotel will have a negative effect on the 300 bird species that live in the area. Given the importance that the community places on the preserve, the influx of tourists and money into the community could create funds to improve the sanctuary. The influx of money could be used to keep up the sanctuary, pay employees to clean the area and take care of the birds, or even the cost of wildlife specialists that could give their opinion on how to create a better environment for the birds as well as take care of them. Although it may take a piece of land from the sanctuary
The author of this petition makes many assumptions about the effects that the Smith Corporation will have on the community. It is quite possible that the building of the small hotel could benefit the community much more than harm it. The corporation could improve the economy by bringing jobs to the hotel, as well as causing an increase in tourists. Although it may seem bad that a small piece of the wildlife preserve is sold to a corporation, there shouldn't be assumptions made about the effects on the wildlife without any evidence. The evidence might prove that the corporation will cause the community to flourish like never before
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 535 350
No. of Characters: 2499 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.809 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.671 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.528 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.318 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.052 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.364 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.37 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.547 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 311, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...rvation of the sanctuary, a small hotel could possibly have a positive effect on the community...
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Line 8, column 563, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the birds as well as take care of them. Although it may take a piece of land from the sa...
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Line 8, column 618, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... take a piece of land from the sanctuary The author of this petition makes many a...
^^^^^
Line 10, column 453, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...reserve is sold to a corporation, there shouldnt be assumptions made about the effects o...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, then, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 28.8173652695 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 55.5748502994 137% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 16.3942115768 177% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2547.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 533.0 441.139720559 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77861163227 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80487177365 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59826402172 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.367729831144 0.468620217663 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 799.2 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9450031087 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.285714286 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.380952381 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.70786347227 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237718203583 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0771414386808 0.0743258471296 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762027300217 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144085861826 0.128457276422 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440777430615 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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