In a study of the movie-watching preferences of citizens of Filmopolis conducted by the Film and Television Institute,most respondents said they preferred to watch action movies.However,a second study conducted by the same researchers found that the videos most frequently rented from video stores and libraries were animated children movies.Therefore,it can be concluded that the respondents in the first study had misinterpreted their movie preferences.
The conclusion of the author that the respondents in the first study misinterpreted their movie preference is not essentially correct . The author's thinking is based on certain assumptions which needs to be fully justified before this conclusion can be considered valid .
Firstly , the author does not present adequate details about the study conducted by Film and Television Institute . The sample size considered for the study is unknown . It might be 100 or it might be 5 in which case the results of the study may not be relevant . Moreover , the questionnaire which might have been used in the study may contain more questions related actions movies and less questions related to other kinds of movies . In such case , the result of study will always be more inclined towards action movies.Additionally , ' more respondents ' is vague term . It does not suggest the exact number . The author should have mentioned statistical data to support his point.
Secondly , the author says that the second study conducted by the same researchers found that videos most frequently rented from video stores and libraries were animated movie children . The author does not provide any evidence that this second study was conducted in the same same region as that of first . If two studies were conducted in totally different regions , then results generated from them are not at all comparable . Furthermore , videos stores and libraries from which people have rented videos might not have many kind of movies from which customers can make choice . Most of the video stores and libraries which are included in the study may only be specialized sellers of animated children movies . Additionally , the region in which this study was conducted might include more number of children than adults . In such case results of the study might not be comparable.
Lastly , it is not mentioned by the author if sample sets used by two studies were same or different . If they are different , results of both studies may not be totally comparable . If they are somewhat overlapping then some results might be true whereas others might be false . We just do not know about it because author does not provide any evidence for samples .
In general , it can be stated that author has not provided sufficient information to prove his assertion correctly and and is based on mere assumptions made by him . To interpret it correctly , he must provide additional statistical data and details of the studies .
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Essay evaluation report
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argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 404 350
No. of Characters: 2007 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.483 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.968 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.577 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.733 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.519 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, lastly, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, whereas, in general, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2057.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 403.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10421836228 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75711069785 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446650124069 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0306531434 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3181818182 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09090909091 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 43.0 5.25449101796 818% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.67664670659 299% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256674807287 0.218282227539 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856905929036 0.0743258471296 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753187383482 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128480004424 0.128457276422 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0788533322247 0.0628817314937 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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