In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The writer here mentions/ explains about the ranking of the Mason river as the top rated for water sports like swimming, boating and fishing. The river was less used for these recreational activities; however, the city park department devotes little of its budget for maintenance. There have been complaints for years for residents regarding the quality of river water and its smell. Thus the author suggests the city government devote more money for cleaning the river water so that the use of the Mason rive for recreational activities would increase. How could the increase in money for maintenance would increase of river water? How often cleaning needs to be done?
Firstly, the argumentor mentions that the city park department devotes little of its budget for maintenance but the amount that was devoted was not mentioned anywhere. Also the period of the survey was not mentioned to explain when was the Mason river last used for recreational purpose, how did the water quality go down, who was responsible for regular check on quality, when was last survey taken?
Secondly there was no supporting statement to say to what extent was the river cleaned with the amount of money provided by the city park department. Even if we assume that the river was previously used every weekend for water sports then the cleanup was required every week so no survey data was provided to confirm on the periodical cleaning/maintenance of the river water or number of visits by the responsible department.
Thirdly there was no evidence to calculate what is the amount or the budget expected from the city government for the yearly maintenance of recreational facilities. This could be clearly figured only if we have the data on the budget that was already provided by city government, the frequency of the maintenance of the Mason river and the actual budget required for each time maintenance. We would also require the number of residents who have filed the complaints on the smell of the river and the list of people among the residents to find the frequent users of the river water.
In the view of the above, the argument has failed to convince the readers as how the increase in the budget of maintenance for the Mason river water from the city government would help in the efficient use and maintenance of the same. This would require proper numbers for amount and the headcount using the river for recreational sports. Therefore, the given statement is flawed and unconvincing with no proper data.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 422 350
No. of Characters: 2048 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.532 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.853 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.537 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.624 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.387 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.593 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 385, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...e quality of river water and its smell. Thus the author suggests the city government...
^^^^
Line 2, column 168, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...was devoted was not mentioned anywhere. Also the period of the survey was not mentio...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2086.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 421.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95486935867 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69203204307 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.41567695962 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 656.1 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.7872134032 57.8364921388 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.375 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3125 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 5.70786347227 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351940799783 0.218282227539 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140015854845 0.0743258471296 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0933218655672 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219189905138 0.128457276422 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0933887738818 0.0628817314937 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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