In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes littl

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In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The argument that the Mason city government should make more monetary contribution toward the riverside recreational facilities appears to be logical at the first glance. However, after a detailed examination, I belive this argument is established on a few assupmtions that may not be necessarly true.

To begin with, this argument believes that the plans to clean up the Mason River is definitely effective. However, we will never know certainly that these plans will work until they are executed. Even if the plans are working, there are so many other factors in play that can affect the water’s quality. For example, an unexpected oil leakage from a ship will pollute the water and exacerbate the situation; a large amount of rainfall may cause floodflush that can bring many pollutants to the water as well as make the river smell worse. As a result, we cannot expect the plans will work for sure.

Let’s say that we know for a fact that the water will definitely become cleaner and smell fresher, does it imply an increased utilization in using this Mason river for recreational purposes? Although the residents will probably be glad the river is cleaned up, they may habitually go to where they used to visit to enjoy these activities, such as to the ocean. Also, whenever the residents are on vacation, they may want to take a break from the city and simply take a tour to somewhere else where they are able to enjoy swimming, fishing, or boating. Also, even if the surveyed residents ranked ... as their favorites, they may not able to actually go to do these sports due to time, energy, budget, and other resources.

If there are more and more local people who will play sports on the Mason River, is it a necessity for the government to allocate more money to the riverside recreational facilities forthwith? The argument not only assumed there will be an increase in the utiliztion of the Mason, but also expected the increase is so drastic that the current facilities will not be sufficient. It could be very likely that the growth of people going the the river will be slow. Unless the goverment has carefully evaluated the capacities of the current facilities and realistically calculated the number in growth, it is very presumotious to conclude more money should be devoted to the facilities .

To conclude, before the goverment can prove that the water quality will be better and that there will be a substantial increase of utilization of riverside facilities, we need more time to consider and examine this proposal.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: the
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...oney should be devoted to the facilities . To conclude, before the goverment can...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, so, well, as to, for example, such as, as a result, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.9520958084 193% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2123.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 431.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92575406032 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72900658091 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484918793503 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 691.2 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 2.70958083832 369% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7276747242 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.882352941 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3529411765 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23529411765 5.70786347227 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188475441666 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0642658672097 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421321219671 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0990549411743 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631774522338 0.0628817314937 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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flaws:
the arguments are not exactly correct.

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Let's analyze the structure of the statement and argue accordingly:

condition 1:
For years there have been complaints about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. //those complains are from common people or from sports lovers?

condition 2:
Use of the river for water sport is, therefore, sure to increase. //maybe the water is too turbulent and not fit for water sports

conclusion:
The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational activities. //if more money in this year's budget is for riverside recreational activities, then the money for other favorite recreational activities will be less.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 431 350
No. of Characters: 2055 1500
No. of Different Words: 207 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.556 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.768 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.611 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.938 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.444 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.587 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5