There is now evidence that the relaxed pace of life in small towns promotes better health and greater longevity than does the hectic pace of life in big cities. Businesses in the small town of Leeville report fewer days of sick leave taken by individual workers than do businesses in the nearby large city of Masonton. Furthermore, Leeville has only one physician for its one thousand residents, but in Masonton the proportion of physicians to residents is five times as high. Finally, the average age of Leeville residents is significantly higher than that of Masonton residents. These findings suggest that people seeking longer and healthier lives should consider moving to small communities.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
According to above passage, the author insists that slow life in rural area is better than busy life in urban area for healthier life with several grounds. At first glance, these argument seems to be somewhat convincing, but further reflection reveals that there are many unsubstantiated speculations that hinder the author from developing logical consequence.
To begin with, mentioning number of days of sick leave, the author presumes days of sick leave could be a measure of health of residents. The author implies that people should move to rural area where residents use fewer days of sick leave which means more lively. However, this assumption is fallacious for several exceptions. This presumption relies on that there is no lie for using sick leave. However, many people use sick leave for their privacy plan even though they are not sick. As another reason, criterion of using day off could be different between both people. For example, people in pastoral region are inclined to consider small disease not serious, but people in big cities can regard even small cold as a big problem. So, we should take account of criterion when they will use their criterion.
Secondly, the author assumes that proportion of doctor is a standard of longevity from the passage citing proportion of doctor. The speaker connotes that people should move to Leeville which has lower ratio of doctor. Though, this presumption is fallacy. Percentage of doctor can tell their health condition but, there are a few doctors because of inferior terms of working. most People pursuing pleasure from many accommodations like theater, department stores, or metros are not willing to spend their time in pastoral region. And, many people feel solitude in where few residents exists nearby.
Furthermore, it is possible to guess that supposition that the average age is a yardstick of healthier life underlies the reference of the average age. Nevertheless, this premise seems far-fetched. Elder people can move into Leeville because of their penchant of pastoral life. Also, juveniles go to big cities for versatile reasons like their dreams or amenity. These tendency of people will result changing the average age in both areas that lead result mentioned in this paragraph.
To sum up, the author may not necessarily be wrong to assert that if shifting from hectic life to relaxed life. But, the speaker's assertion rests on suspicious assumption which needs more scrutiny to undergird it. To bolster the argument, these investigation should clarify meaning of evidences of sick leave, proportion of doctor, and the average of age.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 423 350
No. of Characters: 2140 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.535 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.059 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.561 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.391 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.51 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.565 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.274 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.485 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.058 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 174, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this argument' or 'these arguments'?
Suggestion: this argument; these arguments
... with several grounds. At first glance, these argument seems to be somewhat convincing, but fu...
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Line 3, column 755, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...old as a big problem. So, we should take account of criterion when they will use ...
^^
Line 5, column 219, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eville which has lower ratio of doctor. Though, this presumption is fallacy. Percentag...
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Line 5, column 376, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Most
...s because of inferior terms of working. most People pursuing pleasure from many acco...
^^^^
Line 7, column 364, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this tendency' or 'These tendencies'?
Suggestion: This tendency; These tendencies
...e reasons like their dreams or amenity. These tendency of people will result changing the aver...
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Line 9, column 122, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'speakers'' or 'speaker's'?
Suggestion: speakers'; speaker's
...m hectic life to relaxed life. But, the speakers assertion rests on suspicious assumptio...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 240, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this investigation' or 'these investigations'?
Suggestion: this investigation; these investigations
... undergird it. To bolster the argument, these investigation should clarify meaning of evidences of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, for example, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2204.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 423.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21040189125 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63114726177 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539007092199 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3357437296 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8333333333 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08333333333 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163232677538 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0418533656276 0.0743258471296 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489710394789 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.087925542893 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039852257551 0.0628817314937 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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