Because of a low number of sales of issues that featured political news, the publisher of the Newsbeat magazine recommends to an emphasis on economics and personal finance issues and asserts that recent survey showed that great number of readers are interested in economic issues. Meanwhile, the editor of Newsbeat rejects this purpose and states few magazines offer extensive political coverage anymore. However, the statements of the publisher and editor are untenable and based on shallow assumptions. Due to the presence of acute fallacies in the claims, their arguments appear to be feeble.
To begin with, the publisher of the magazine does not illuminate on a recently conducted survey in a detailed manner. Without scrutinizing the number of people, area of a survey conducted, age-range of people involved in the survey, the publisher cannot simply presume to emphasize economics and personal finance in his magazine would increase the sales of the magazine. Furthermore, the publisher states that the survey was conducted among the readers of general interest magazine and takes for granted that the case would be the same for Newsbeat magazine as well. She fails to ponder that is the survey done by another magazine applicable to Newsbeat magazine.
The publisher sounds imprudent to claim that including issues about personal finance would augment the sales of Newsbeat magazine. This is just the publisher's groundless assumption and has no relevant evidence to support this assumption. Maybe the customers of Newsbeat magazine read about personal finance from other magazines present in the market. Or the case may be they read on personal finance through the online newspaper. Had the publisher conducted a thorough survey on costumers about personal finance and mentioned the data in the argument, it would augment the credibility of the conclusion.
The Newsbeat's editor denies the purpose of the publisher of focusing on economic and personal finance asserting the point that only a 'few' magazine cover vast political coverage. But he does not mention the exact number of magazines covering political news. It can be the case that few magazines that cover political news extensively print the superior quality of news than that is covered by Newsbeat magazine. This case, if true, would assist to weaken the publisher's conclusion.
It can be concluded that since the conclusion of the publisher and the editor rely largely on uncorroborated evidence, they must contemplate on various factors mentioned above to conclude whether to prioritize economic issues or political issues or personal finance in the Newsbeat magazine.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 415 350
No. of Characters: 2194 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.513 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.287 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.71 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 189 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 149 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 114 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.056 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.395 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.37 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.576 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a detailed manner" with adverb for "detailed"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...luminate on a recently conducted survey in a detailed manner. Without scrutinizing the number of peo...
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Line 3, column 665, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...gazine applicable to Newsbeat magazine. The publisher sounds imprudent to claim ...
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Line 6, column 364, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...ines present in the market. Or the case may be they read on personal finance through t...
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Line 8, column 459, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'publishers'' or 'publisher's'?
Suggestion: publishers'; publisher's
...se, if true, would assist to weaken the publishers conclusion. It can be concluded that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2240.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 415.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39759036145 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76158245209 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457831325301 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.3945678655 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.444444444 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0555555556 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323593259424 0.218282227539 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113405955451 0.0743258471296 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0824160465814 0.0701772020484 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204890558178 0.128457276422 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0756432740684 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 48.3550499002 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.