Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
The author is trying to convey about a specific research that has been conducted by Dr. Field which was 20 years ago and a recent research by Dr. Karp, both the research are about children in Tertia being reared by entire village rather than biological parents. Through the authors tone it is easily figured out that Dr. Karp recent research falsifies Dr. Field reseach which was conducted way before. There is no clarification as to why now interview-centered method was being conducted.
The foremost reason as to why the author's view is under shadows is that the Dr. Field had conducted the research through observation-centered approach where else the current research is being conducted through interview-centered method. It should be the other way round that the research now should be through observation-centered approach so as to findout what was missing or in valid in Dr. Field theory. Also it can be different answer for the person who is randomly selected for the interview, thus it is necessary to formulate a group of specific individual that are acustomed to rearing have have been reared by the entire village.
To further lucid things,it is also told that children talked about their biological parents than about other adults does not provide a strong evidence to the fact that Dr. Field's research was false. Infact Dr. Field had done a obsevation-centered approach which was surveying, observing no of people and noting down thing which were common, thus it is more valid that an interview-centered approch.
However, it is also told that some anthropologists recommend to obtain accurate information but are not willing or eager to find out thus it can not be assured that there will be a research conducted for sure. It is even recommended by a few anthropologists and not most of them are interested. Also the time gap between second research is 20 years so it clearly justifies that there are only a few people who are seriously interested into finding out about the Tertian child-rearing practices.
To clear things, if further research on the subject is conducted via the interview-centered method than it would simply be as the one done by Dr. Karp before. The outcome would be similar and the thing that would matter the most about the research that is finding out that are children reared by an entire village would not even have a true outcome as the people being interviewed will still tell the same story again. The reality will still not be disclosed, it would just be liking scribbling over a written paper again.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 430 350
No. of Characters: 2095 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.554 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.872 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.011 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.173 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.381 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.639 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.137 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 38, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'specific research'.
Suggestion: specific research
The author is trying to convey about a specific research that has been conducted by Dr. Field wh...
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Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'recent research'.
Suggestion: recent research
...by Dr. Field which was 20 years ago and a recent research by Dr. Karp, both the research are abou...
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Line 1, column 180, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...by Dr. Karp, both the research are about children in Tertia being reared by entir...
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Line 5, column 341, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...e through observation-centered approach so as to findout what was missing or in valid in...
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Line 5, column 389, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... findout what was missing or in valid in Dr. Field theory. Also it can be differe...
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Line 5, column 409, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ssing or in valid in Dr. Field theory. Also it can be different answer for the pers...
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Line 5, column 595, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: have
...ndividual that are acustomed to rearing have have been reared by the entire village. ...
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Line 5, column 600, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...dual that are acustomed to rearing have have been reared by the entire village. ...
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Line 9, column 24, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...re village. To further lucid things,it is also told that children talked about...
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Line 9, column 168, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ovide a strong evidence to the fact that Dr. Fields research was false. Infact Dr...
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Line 9, column 227, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ch was false. Infact Dr. Field had done a obsevation-centered approach which was ...
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Line 9, column 289, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...approach which was surveying, observing no of people and noting down thing which w...
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Line 13, column 52, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommend obtaining'.
Suggestion: recommend obtaining
... is also told that some anthropologists recommend to obtain accurate information but are not willin...
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Line 13, column 296, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ts and not most of them are interested. Also the time gap between second research is...
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Line 17, column 475, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...l still not be disclosed, it would just be liking scribbling over a written paper again. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, so, still, thus, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 44.0 19.6327345309 224% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2142.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 429.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99300699301 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05195955161 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.449883449883 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.7920709906 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.0 119.503703932 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6428571429 23.324526521 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204167589157 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754240257369 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058592019129 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121689704734 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511536472761 0.0628817314937 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.3799401198 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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