"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
In the given argument author states that among two real states firms in his town Adam reality is superior. To support the conclusion author presents various evidence such as, Firm’s annual revenue, his personal experience etc. At first glance, these evidence seem to bolster the author’s conclusion. But when we examine the given evidence meticulously author is unsuccessful to maintain several indispensible factors and raises some skeptical question. Hence, the author’s conclusion can be considered as incomplete and logically not convincing.
First of all author assumes that since the Adams reality has greater number of employees than the Fitch Reality and author makes this fact as measuring device for superiority but this may not be true. If a company has large number of employees but many of them are useless and extraneous then obviously such company cannot perform better than those company having little but effective worker. Rather these bulky and non significant employees may be the source of clumsiness of company and economical burden.
Another evidence to support his conclusion is comparison of annual revenue of two companies. He cites that Adams Reality’s annual revenue is higher than that of Fitch Reality so he concludes that Adams Reality is superior than Fitch. But by just observing the annual revenue of any company, can anybody ascertain that such company is really great? Perhaps company may collect the large amount of revenue but its production expenditure may be more than income so, company may be in loss rather than profit. But on the other hand, company may be collecting lesser revenue than other company but it may be gaining consistently because of its lower expenditure.
Similarly here, he has also presented his own experience to make his conclusion more pragmatic. But these personal experience are not creditable. He has sold the house via Fitch Reality in four months about ten years ago but last year he just sold his house in one months. However, ten years back’s real state’s condition and almost current condition may not be compared properly. It might be possible that ten year’s ago there may be economic recession because of that there might be less business in this field but such problem may have been vanished presently because of that his house may have been sold in precipitated way presently.
In conclusion, author’s argument is rife with holes and flaws, so it is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it, author needs to provide specific evidence as we discussed above, perhaps by the way of a reliable detailed analysis of superiority of Adam’s Reality firm over Fitch Reality. Also, author ought to have knowledge about other contributing factor in order to make argument wise and plausible. Without further research this argument will be unsubstantial and open to debate.
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- "Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twic 82
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 461 350
No. of Characters: 2339 1500
No. of Different Words: 230 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.634 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.074 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.608 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 181 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.952 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.677 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.303 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.54 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.146 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 517, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...thor's conclusion can be considered as incomplete and logically not convinci...
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Line 2, column 343, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this company' or 'those companies'?
Suggestion: this company; those companies
...such company cannot perform better than those company having little but effective worker. Rat...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 393, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...any having little but effective worker. Rather these bulky and non significant employe...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 214, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ality so he concludes that Adams Reality is superior than Fitch. But by just obse...
^^
Line 3, column 228, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
...ncludes that Adams Reality is superior than Fitch. But by just observing the annual...
^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...ntly because of its lower expenditure. Similarly here, he has also presented his own exp...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 261, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one month', 'a month', or simply 'months'?
Suggestion: one month; a month; months
...but last year he just sold his house in one months. However, ten years back's real st...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, really, similarly, so, then, in conclusion, such as, by the way, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2429.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 461.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26898047722 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81990488856 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507592190889 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 776.7 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5843748228 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.409090909 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9545454545 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31818181818 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108022439702 0.218282227539 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357855163947 0.0743258471296 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059055552972 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0664229606713 0.128457276422 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247044871283 0.0628817314937 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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