"Two years ago, the town of Seaside Vista opened a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. Since then, the Seaside Vista Tourism Board has reported a 20% increase in visitors. In addition, local banks reported a steep rise in the number of new business loan applications they received this year. The amount of tax money collected by Seaside Vista has also increased, allowing the town to announce plans to improve Seaside Vista's roads and bridges. We recommend building a similar golf course and resort hotel in Brindleburg. We predict that this project will generate additional tax revenue that the city can use to fund much-needed public improvements."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author of the argument purportedly highlights that Brindluberg city should start building a municipal golf and resort hotel like as the seaside city in order to absorb more tourists and benefit from tax and revenue to improve public facilities. However, the premises upon which he puts his claim are fallacious. For the support of which some critical, yet ignored question should be addressed.
First, the author attributes that based on a report the seaside vista tourism has increased 20 percent during two years ago. However, it does not lend credence to the argument since a question that might arise is whether the information of two years ago is helpful for raising tourism industry. One point that should be considered is that the report could not be reliable and accurate owing to the fact that it offers data of two years ago and there is a possibility that those data became obsolete. Indeed, maybe the tourism industry increased just during those years and then decline in next years in seaside vista.
The author also points out that the amount of tax collected by seaside has increased dramatically, which provides an opportunity for the city to improve roads and bridges. Although it might seem tenable at a face, it has some defects since you can always ask this question if an increase in tax collected by the city could support the improvement of the public facilities. One of the main, if not the only, problem with the premise is that although collected tax and revenue might be helpful for the city, it could not be enough to support public improvements like roads and bridges. Indeed, the tax increased during two years ago and the author does not provide any information about next years. What if the collected tax diminish since then? What if the number of tourists decreased drastically? Moreover, building new roads and bridges need a substantial amount of budget for maintenance and repair, what if they could not support it by the tax collected?
Finally, as set forth by the author many banks announced a rise in loan applications by businesses during that year. Nevertheless, the rationale behind this premise could be challenged owing to an unsettled question if an increase in loan applications is related to an improvement of the city by tourism. One point that should not go unnoticed is that maybe businesses apply for the loan just for their own work and in order to run new businesses. In fact, the author does not show any statistic or information about the received loan by businesses whether they spent them for tourism or not. Alongside that, the banks just announced they receive applications and it is not clear whether banks gave the loan to applicants or not.
Having scrutinized all the premises, a logical conclusion that can be drawn is that there are a number of questions, having been ignored by the author while the answer of which could add to the logic of each premise.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the arguments are not exactly correct. two main arguments here:
1. maybe 'a new municipal golf course and resort hotel' is not the main reason for the improvements
2. it works for Brindleburg, it may not work for other locations/cities/areas
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 499 350
No. of Characters: 2384 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.726 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.778 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.555 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.95 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.932 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.32 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.552 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, while, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2441.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 499.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89178356713 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63002976371 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430861723447 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 751.5 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4390656487 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.05 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.95 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20489995479 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683859820916 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771077736061 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106778158554 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0977138058978 0.0628817314937 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6
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