The argument is based on the realization of increased tax collection and income to the city due to attractions like a golf course and resort hotel. The mayor also remarked increased applications of business loan which is the indicator of better business opportunities in the future. In sum, the mayor suggests opening another golf club and hotel for public improvement. The suggested idea seems beneficial if some clarifications are given to the same.
People are always attracted towards recent amusements and want innovation day to day. Improvement in visitors to the golf course and hotel shows that they are containing something innovative that people love to visit. Further, a rise in business loan applications to the local bank increased which shows that people want to explore the place and want to adopt the same for their business. But, reasons for loan applications are not mentioned here. It is possible if places other than these amusements are a reason to establish a business here.
The writer suggests opening the same amusements as built earlier. It is possible that the number of people will be decreased as there is nothing innovative. That will cause a decrease in earnings as well as make them lose visitors, too. SO, they should provide something different instead of golf course and hotel.
The interest of people is also a factor that affects earnings here. It is possible that the ratio of people who like golf is less and they like to explore another thing, too. In that case, they should provide an amusement which includes all type of entertainment.
In sum, though the solution seems agreeable, we should consider some aspects which the author has not demostrated.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In sum, though the solution seems agreeable, we should consider some aspects which the author has not demostrated.
Error: demostrated Suggestion: demonstrated
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argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 281 350
No. of Characters: 1383 1500
No. of Different Words: 142 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.094 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.922 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.696 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 97 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.529 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.457 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.471 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.305 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.541 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 156, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...e golf course and hotel shows that they are containing something innovative that people love t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, well, another thing, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1425.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 281.0 441.139720559 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07117437722 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74019965796 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512455516014 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.2091899214 57.8364921388 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.8235294118 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5294117647 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.23529411765 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0860697594182 0.218282227539 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0295997805958 0.0743258471296 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459561285291 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0465515439443 0.128457276422 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485013749899 0.0628817314937 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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