The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
To improve the work ethics , overall profits and prevent the employees from wasting time in office the vice president of human resources recommends to install spying software to track the internet usage of employees and hence , curb the potential recreational activities in office . Stated in this way the vice president’s recommendations fails to mentions several key factors on the basis of which it can be evaluated. However , the recommendation can be evaluated if the vice president can provide evidences on the three assumptions.
First of all , the vice president readily assumes that if the company applies such stringent policies to its employees , they will not retaliate and accept the companies policies as it is . It may the case that the employees feel that their privacy is compromised and they decide to leave the job . Furthermore , might be the need for recreational activities that the employees need to be engaged in after completing a certain amount of job and the company doesn’t provide such facilities so they are compelled to have such breaks on their own .
Secondly , the argument assumes that its workers are engaged in recreational activities during working hours only . It may be true that the employees engage in recreational activities during their lunch hours and may work diligently in their working hours . In that case the vice president’s recommendation will fall apart and the company will not make any significant profit increment by keeping an eye on the employees internet usage.
Finally , the argument does not take into account the cost of implementing an internet spyware and its correlation with the profit of company. It is possible that there are very few employees who work on the workstation provided by the company but many of the employees use mobile data for recreational activities during work hours . So even after implementing the software to detect the internet usage the company will be unable to prevent its employees from engaging in recreational activities during work .
In conclusion , the vice president’s recommendations , as it stands now is considerably flawed due to its reliance on unwarranted assumptions . If the vice president can provide evidences to substantiate the argument , only then the viability of the recommendations can be determined.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 367 350
No. of Characters: 1902 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.377 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.183 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.025 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.214 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.108 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.392 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.65 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.131 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1958.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 366.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34972677596 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2260117591 2.78398813304 116% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459016393443 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5057716693 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.857142857 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1428571429 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 5.70786347227 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 35.0 5.25449101796 666% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181463257561 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737612025207 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416151424373 0.0701772020484 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112730300662 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279994048787 0.0628817314937 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.3799401198 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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