Based on the facts that Workers in Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in Masonton and that relative to population size stress-related illness is proportionally much less reported in Leeville than in Masonton, the Leeville Chamber of Commerce concludes that the people living in the smaller city of Leeville live a relatively relaxed pace of life and benefit from it. The argument is well presented but not well reasoned, not strong enough to lead to the conclusion the author want. Following problems serve to undermine the argument.
First and foremost, the author of the argument presents evidence that workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in the large city of Masonton to support the conclusion. However, the author is falling to consider other possible alternatives to the fewer sick days. It is possible that workers in Leeville is facing so harsh employment conditions that they could not be free to take sick days when they want, which is much more unhealthy compared with their counterparts in the large city of Masoton. To strengthen the argument, the author would benefit from implementing a normed survey asking the workers in the two cities the detailed situation about whether they can take sick days as they want.
The author reasonably assumes that fact that there are less records of stress-related illness in Leeville than in Masonton relative to population size. The argument suggests that the fact results from much fewer stressful jobs in the smaller city, which in consequence leads too much relaxed pace of life. Nevertheless the author do not take in consideration that the opposite may be true as well. Actually, the smaller city could have much higher amount of stressed jobs. Perhaps the workers here are less vulnerable to the stressed working environment, or maybe the most of their wages are not high enough to afford these workers to go to hospitals and check stress-related illness. Unless the connection between the lower diagnosis of stress-related illness and the relaxed pace of life is representative, valid and reliable, it could not be used to effectively back the argument.
In a nut shell, although at first the argument proposed by the author seems convincing and cogent, there are several gaps in the reasoning. In consideration of the fact given, some alternative possibilities are plausible as well. The author fails to adequately support the interference presented in the argument. One can not unequivocally conclude that the city of Leeville has the relatively relaxed pace of life because of the lower diagnosis of stress-related illness and fewer sick days taken by workers.
- Workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in the large city of Masonton, 50 miles away. Moreover, relative to population size, the diagnosis of stress-related illness is proportionally much lower in Leeville than in Masonton. 58
- Ten years ago,as part of a comprehensive urban renewal program,the city of Transopolis adapted for industrial use a large area of severely substandard housing near the freeway.Subsequently,several factories were constructed there,crime rates in the area d 66
- Workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in the large city of Masonton, 50 miles away. Moreover, relative to population size, the diagnosis of stress-related illness is proportionally much lower in Leeville than in Masonton. 58
- Workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in the large city of Masonton, 50 miles away. Moreover, relative to population size, the diagnosis of stress-related illness is proportionally much lower in Leeville than in Masonton. 50
- Workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in the large city of Masonton, 50 miles away. Moreover, relative to population size, the diagnosis of stress-related illness is proportionally much lower in Leeville than in Masonton. 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 56, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun records is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...onably assumes that fact that there are less records of stress-related illness in Le...
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Line 5, column 307, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Nevertheless,
...ce leads too much relaxed pace of life. Nevertheless the author do not take in consideration...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2242.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 435.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15402298851 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86819360379 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448275862069 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.1987055488 57.8364921388 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.882352941 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5882352941 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.493884972857 0.218282227539 226% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145455287327 0.0743258471296 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.169293818078 0.0701772020484 241% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.322078477425 0.128457276422 251% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104756014659 0.0628817314937 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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