The following appeared in a memorandum written by the vice president of Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products.
"Previous experience has shown that our stores are most profitable in areas where residents are highly concerned with leading healthy lives. We should therefore build our next new store in Plainsville, which has many such residents. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club, which nearly closed five years ago due to lack of business, has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. We can even anticipate a new generation of customers: Plainsville's schoolchildren are required to participate in a 'fitness for life' program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age."
GRE Argument 1
In this memo the vice president of Nature's Way CNW, a chain of stores selling health food and health-related products, recommends opening a store in Plamesville. To support this recommendation the vice president cites the following facts about Plainesville: (1) sales of exercise shoes and clothing are at all-time highs; (2) the local health club is more popular than ever; and (3) the city's schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness program. Close scrutiny of each of these facts, however, reveals that none of them lend credible support to the recommendation.
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Sentence: To support this recommendation the vice president cites the following facts about Plainesville: 1 sales of exercise shoes and clothing are at all-time highs; 2 the local health club is more popular than ever; and 3 the city's schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness program.
Error: schoolchildren Suggestion: school children
Sentence: To better assess the recommendation, I would need to know why Plainesville's health club is nonular, and whv Plainesville does not contain more health clubs.
Error: whv Suggestion: why
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