Although innovations such as video, computers, and the internet seem to offer schools improved method for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning
Author’s claim “Although innovations such as video, computers, and the internet seem to offer schools improved method for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning”, in my opinion author have overlooked certain benefits that these technologies have add up to students in making the learning process efficient, However, due to technologies students are spending more time with technologies rather than learning from books which provide comprehensive details about each event. At the outset, I would like to accord with author. Following are the reasons for my accordance.
Firstly, Average time spend with these technologies by people is been increasing day-by-day because these technologies, gadgets, etc. are enchanting people. In Past, students were mostly seen delved in books to learn any concept whereas considering current situation, students download soft copy from interest and instead of learning the every details of an event they download a brief version from internet. Today, students have forgotten the real sense of reading where they used to recite stories, poems, events from the books and new innovations like applications of audio books have even worsen the situation where students become passive and have not active communication. If such people are not released of such adverse effects of technologies on them, the day is no far where students will fail to appreciate the learning process and their inquisitive nature will became passive nature.
Secondly, Advent of video’s, computers and Internet have also threaten the heath of people. Such innovations were made so that burden on people to be abreast with information can be reduced as these innovations provide easy accessible to information but considering current situation, these innovations have resulted in adverse effects on health of people. Today, even small child get early eye-nearsightedness whereas in past where students practice learning from books have not experienced such early eye-nearsightedness.
However, these technologies have freed up time for teachers, so that they can utilize that time for betterment of the students like by providing individual attention, solving doubts of students, etc. Thus, author claims that technologies have distracted students form real learning process have a limit in above case, where teachers can provide individual time to students while they are using these technologies. During my secondary schools, my teachers used to go to each and every students to get brief up about what they have learned by watching videos, on internet. This helped many of us to learn new things with more efficacy. Videos are beneficial because they provide visual representation of an event and many studies stated that students learn through visuals with more efficiency.
On wrapping up, technologies have both sides, good as well as bad. It highly depends on the person use. Thus, author’s claim that these technologies have impeded students to have real learning is not wholly correct as these technologies have also been boon in making students understand abstruse as well as mundane topics with efficiency.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: added
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Message: Did you mean: 'In the Past'?
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'worsened'.
Suggestion: worsened
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'become'
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Suggestion: threatened
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...well as mundane topics with efficiency.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, thus, well, whereas, while, such as, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2719.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 487.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58316221766 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01628382543 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498973305955 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 826.2 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 117.852530039 60.3974514979 195% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.105263158 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6315789474 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84210526316 5.21951772744 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31281815069 0.243740707755 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0842249428838 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10782739761 0.0758088955206 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196052010658 0.150359130593 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138790342637 0.0667264976115 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.1392134831 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 12.1639044944 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 100.480337079 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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