Co-operation and competition are two schools of thought, which an individual required for personal and social development. The author states that co-operation is more important than competition for leadership. The given topic is highly contentious because some people may go for the topic while others can't approve it at all. I mostly agree with the given argument for the following reasons.
First of all, a sense of co-operation is very important to solve the global issue such as climate change. It is almost impossible for any country to settle the problem of climate change and global warming. For instance, if Nepal started to mitigate the effect of climate change, it's an individual effort to solve the effect of climate change will be inadequate. So, it is necessary for the leadership to have the ability to co-operate with the leaders of the other countries to solve the serious problem. If the leader has not any sense of co-operation and has only a competition attitude then the settlement of complex issues is very difficult. So, it is very necessary to install a sense of co-operation in the mind of young children ( future leaders of the country) so that they can settle the most serious problem.
Secondly, leaders have a responsibility to perform various group works. Hence, it is very pressing for young people to develop a sense of co-operation among young people so that they can perform their work more efficiently. For example, consider a leader in society who have to settle a dispute between two parties. If he hasn't a sense of co-operation and has only a sense of competition then it is a very arduous task for him to settle issues. When people behave like a competitor, then the trust of the follower toward his leader will decline, so it is very necessary to develop a sense of co-operation in young people.
However, in certain fields, healthy competition is necessary. For instance, in business, a sense of competition is necessary. When an individual does not have a sense of competition then the likelihood of getting higher profit may not be possible. It is possible that the other competitor may develop similar products and the sell of the other company products may decrease. In sports, a sense of competition is often desirable. The main goal of players during their game is to defeat others' teams and become the winner of the game. When the player has a sense of competition that I/we have to win the match then they work hard and make great efforts to achieve that goal. Similarly, a sense of healthy competition is often required in education as well. When an individual has a sense of competition that I have to stand first in the class then he tries to make great efforts to achieve that goal, which ultimately increases the quality of education as well.
Though a sense of competition is often desirable in some fields such as business, sports, education, etc, However, a sense of co-operation is more important for the overall development of the country. Hence, young children should have installed a sense of co-operation in them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 303, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...eople may go for the topic while others cant approve it at all. I mostly agree with ...
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Line 2, column 735, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...-operation in the mind of young children future leaders of the country so that th...
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Line 3, column 322, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...le a dispute between two parties. If he hasnt a sense of co-operation and has only a ...
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Line 4, column 126, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s, a sense of competition is necessary. When an individual does not have a sense of ...
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Line 5, column 279, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...talled a sense of co-operation in them.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, well, while, for example, for instance, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 12.9106741573 232% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2554.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 522.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89272030651 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83659489648 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.404214559387 0.4932671777 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 821.7 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.823328758 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2307692308 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0769230769 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07692307692 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130736191647 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.049986891073 0.0831039109588 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510737271605 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0967224737486 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521227114907 0.0667264976115 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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