The best way for a society to prepare its young is to instill a sense of both competition and cooperation.
Leadership is one the most fundamental skill which should be present in each and every person. Young people are often considered as the future of our nation so the prosperity of the nation is in the hands of the young leaders. The proponents prompts that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry is by instilling sense of cooperation not competition. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the author due to following reasons.
Firstly, a society is always run in a subtle way if the leaders have a sense of cooperation with their fellow members in order for the well being of the society.
For example, during the medieval ages nations were ruled by plutocrates and oligarchic leaders. Since those leaders had a sense of competition as who will rule the nation, the welfare of the citizens were harmed and a steady decline was seen in the development of a nation. The above example illustrates that if the country would have lead by democracy instead of oligarchy people of the nation would have cooperated with the government. Hence, the society should be keen on preparing young people with sense of cooperation to forsee a better outcome eventually.
Additionally, In this advanced and intricate society every individual is a competitor and tries to seek the highest position by all means. For instance, a young Cricket captain is the leader of his team but in order to win the match he should cooperate and appreciate the senior teammates opinion rather than compete with them and take selfish decisions to secure his captaincy in the team. Cooperative leaders strives a society or team way more further than competitive leaders as a sense of cooperation engenders confidence, trust and hope. Hence, young people should always get the best out of it from cooperation and not from competition.
Obviously, there will be some who will argue that competitive leaders bring a change in the surrounding which is transient and also forgets to take into consideration the well being of his fellow members. The rest will agree to the author that the betterment of society is well determined by cooperation on a longer run. Hence, In my opinion the prompt of the passage is highly inclined towards the agreement that young people should choose cooperation over competition
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: prompt
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Suggestion: teammates'; teammate's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, so, still, well, for example, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1940.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 390.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97435897436 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80042262237 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2467777782 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.25 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.375 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9375 5.21951772744 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0752976094959 0.243740707755 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0290502935639 0.0831039109588 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0226493602541 0.0758088955206 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.043156082975 0.150359130593 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313427680711 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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