The best way for a society to prepare its young people for
leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by
instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
It goes without saying that in this sophisticated and ever-goning era in which we live, people experience more complicated communities and relationships. they have to be empowered with means of communication to amelorize relationships and groups' performance in order to make a better life. In such circumstances, the role leaders is crucial. they push and motivate others to excel in their career and community. While some believe that youngsters should learn and practice cooperation to be better leaders in industry, government or other fields, others claim that competition is the key to achieve the golas. I believe that cooperation plays more vital role but competition is also needed. The reasons and examples to substantiate my notion is elaborated upon underhere.
First, the complexity of the world requires more cooperation and sympathy than competition and challenges to solve the problems. The era of individualism and eccentricity is ended and in new world nobody can overcome all the problems and difficulties through competition and challenge. The problems nowadays human being is encountered is more comples and multi-facet that in most cases nothing can resolve them instead compromisation. Those who respond directly to anyt sort of event tend to lose more. Therefore, the team work and group working is of the most essential abilitirs that young people should learn to be able to be leadership in future.
In addition, big challenges have diverse aspects and complex characteristics. In modern life, either in government or industry-related issues, many teams with different types of abilities should work together to solve the problems. Hence, good communication and healthy relationships between them is of top concerns. In this regard, there should be some leader who is qualified to make equilibrium between the team members and guide the whole team to a converged path. If the competition is prioritized over the cooperation then the team members do not have a common sense and try to show their excellence regardless of other teams. As a result, the outcome is not satisfactory and is far from success.
On the other hand, we can not forget the role of competition in the progress of every projects and human movements. What is called competition is not necessarily means to fight or challenge severely to advance and be better than others. In competition people motivate to act better and spend whatever they have like their energy, time and motivation. young people should also learn how to motivate others to do their best in crucial environment to be better actors and push others.
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- The best way for a society to prepare its young people forleadership in government, industry, or other fields is byinstilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 16
- TPO 50 - 3
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- TPO-52. Integrated Writing Task. Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage. 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 155, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...plicated communities and relationships. they have to be empowered with means of comm...
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Line 1, column 343, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...umstances, the role leaders is crucial. they push and motivate others to excel in th...
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Line 7, column 107, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'solving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: solving
...ympathy than competition and challenges to solve the problems. The era of individualism ...
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Line 7, column 641, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...hould learn to be able to be leadership in future. In addition, big challenges h...
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Line 19, column 352, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Young
...like their energy, time and motivation. young people should also learn how to motivat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, so, then, therefore, while, in addition, sort of, as a result, in most cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2228.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 419.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31742243437 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09241573376 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522673031026 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8314859041 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.272727273 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0454545455 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63636363636 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0892805843061 0.243740707755 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0243552280641 0.0831039109588 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0329433550017 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0564180605867 0.150359130593 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0200685146143 0.0667264976115 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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