The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Competition nurtures the best of talent whereas co-operation ensures its survival. The quality of mutual understanding and co-operation in an individual usually compliments the sense of healthy competition he exercises. I believe that the best way for a society to prepare its youngsters for leadership in various arenas of life is by inculcating in them a sense of mutual co-operation along with healthy competition. In the upcoming paragraphs we will provide the reasoning which corroborates this stand.
Undoubtedly, co-operation makes good leaders, but competition is a born basic instinct that human beings have. Competition can be with colleagues, neighbors, peers, family members or even with self. The true essence and result of competition comes till the point it is healthy and positive. The moment an individual competes with a desire of destruction or revenge it becomes negative and unhealthy. It does not yield the positive results it intends to. The famous example of this is Adolf Hitler, an exceptionally smart and powerful leader, who rose from the scratch, but was ultimately destroyed by his fierce competitive streak to win over his enemies and his desire to destroy their whole race. The very nature of Hitler arising out of his competitive desires instilled a sense of fear among not only his enemies but even among his friends. Consequently, he was considered as unapproachable, uncooperative, stubborn and unyielding in nature. Therefore, it is very important for mankind to keep his competitive desires healthy and constructive. Youngsters should be taught to practice healthy competition in order to unleash their potential and perform greater good in the society rather than creating destruction and negativity.
Co-operation and humility are the two qualities that can set anyone apart from the crowd. Especially when these qualities are coupled with leadership nature, one becomes a rare gem. Mahatma Gandhi is one such leader who was known for his non violence ideology and believed in utmost co-operation even with his enemies. His way of competing with British Empire in his pursuit of independence had been unique. This sense of co-operation and healthy competition even with his enemies endured his fight for independence and made him win against one of the biggest and oldest empires. Without doubt, a quality like co-operation is a must have for a future leader. It is only through co-operation that one can ensure that people will walk along side their leaders and will share their vision. Thus, co-operation is a trait which must be developed among young generation for them to become leaders of tomorrow
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To sum up, mutual co-operation and healthy competition are essentially two complimentary features of any leader and a society needs to instill both these qualities equally in their youngsters in order to enable to them to become a future leader in different fields.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 734, Rule ID: ALONG_SIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'alongside'?
Suggestion: alongside
...at one can ensure that people will walk along side their leaders and will share their visi...
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Line 5, column 904, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... for them to become leaders of tomorrow . To sum up, mutual co-operation and hea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, so, still, therefore, thus, whereas, apart from, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2458.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 463.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30885529158 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03563053822 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518358531317 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 784.8 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7717201003 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.869565217 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1304347826 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52173913043 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152276886767 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0498845433853 0.0831039109588 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550525284905 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111828627563 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063047059232 0.0667264976115 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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