The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
For any society to grow and prosper, it is of utmost importance that the young people are prepared to take leadership roles in government, industry, or any other field. A society functions at it's highest level when the leaders of the society as well as the people who have chosen these leaders are working hand in hand for the overall betterment of the society, however, in no way, it implies that competition is inimical for the development of youth and in turn, for the advancement of society. While I agree with the statement that a sense of cooperation needs to be instilled among the youth, I do also believe that a sense of competition is equally important as well.
Development of young population is one of the most important topic that the government of any nation should not be taking lightly. Developing nations like India are prime examples of how the development of young population is fundamental for the development of the overall nation. In a country like India, education system is such that a sense of competition gets deep rooted in the minds of children from a very early age. Parents and the entire society keeps on pushing their children to extreme limits in the name of development, however, this rarely works as intended. This type of pressure usually leads to the development of toxic mindset and unhealthy competition amongst young people. While competition amongst the youth is important for their overall growth in any sector, it needs to be controlled in a way that the young population of the society doesn't always feel the need to compete with their peers. Society as a whole needs to shift this paradigm. From imbibing a sense of cut throat competition at a very young age, we need to teach the youth about how cooperation amongst all the section of society is equally important.
If young people are taught sense of cooperation from the very beginning, it will lead to a healthy development of the overall society. For example, if a child has a passion towards administrative servives, he/she needs to build that sense of cooperation which will lead him/her to serve the public in the best way possible. A public servant who doesn't inspire sense of cooperation will not be able to bring the society together for it's overall betterment. Similarly, there are numerous people in today's world who are building start-ups at a very young age. They are running billion dollar companies in their early twenties. A leader who doesn't instill a sense of cooperation in the overall enviroment of his/her company is definitely being myopic and this might have a detrimental impact on the overall growth of the company.
While we have talked about sense of overall cooperation in the public services, running a business etc., we cannot ignore the role of competition in the overall development of any section of the society. I strongly believe that healthy competition along with a sense of cooperation is the way forward and while the both may be looked upon as two completely distinct powers operating against each other, the best way for a society to prepare it's young people for leadership is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation as well as healthy competition so that while they are working with each other for attainment of a certain goal, they are also not hesitant in working against each other, motivating each other in the spirit of competition to build something significant for the society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, may, similarly, so, still, well, while, for example, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 58.6224719101 155% => OK
Nominalization: 42.0 12.9106741573 325% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2855.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 584.0 442.535393258 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88869863014 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91590194646 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76191305137 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.412671232877 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 913.5 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 112.212303728 60.3974514979 186% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.263157895 118.986275619 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7368421053 23.4991977007 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63157894737 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.454459611238 0.243740707755 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126261890948 0.0831039109588 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102285987988 0.0758088955206 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.305895945658 0.150359130593 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0980118392492 0.0667264976115 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.8420337079 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.