The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
This topic raises the controversial issues of whether cooperation rather than competition should be taught to young people. Indisputely, competition often drives individuals to outstrip in tasks, allowing an individual's full potential to be reached. Nevertheless, cooperation is essential in the work force and society because each person can provide a unique perspective and skill set in order to reach optimal and efficient production for the greater good. Thus, I generally disagree with the opinion that competition is more valuable and would argue that cooperation, not competition should be instilled in the young as they prepare for leadership positions.
First of all, cooperation is key to a functional and efficient workflow. I would like to point out that everyone as a unique skill set that they can offer. By corralling diverse individuals, pundits of each field can work together and solve interdisciplinary issues. In government, industry and other field, problems are generally byzantines, however, by approaching the issue from multiple angles, the solution can be determined. Furthermore, let us look at the example of how teams can get more work done compared to individuals. In this circumstance, obviously the work load is divided among more people and hence more time can be dedicated to each task. Consequently, it is pretty obvious that teams can get more done.
Although cooperation can optimize workflow, competition can drive individuals to higher standards. For example, naturally individuals will strive to be better than their competition and will perform at a higher level if they are being compared to some else. Therefore, the quality of work and performance may be better with competition. However, individuals working by themselves are still limited by time and energy. Specifically, there is only so much time some one can dedicated to a task before they burn out or it becomes counterproductive due to lack of knowledge and experience in that field. Cooperation in a team can address this issue because diverse experts can tackle a vast amount of tasks seamlessly.
In government, industry, and any other field, efficiency is key, therefore, cooperation is more beneficial. Team players can get more work done compared to individuals, therefore, competition is less valuable when preparing to acquire leadership positions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 206, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an individual' or simply 'individuals'?
Suggestion: an individual; individuals
...ividuals to outstrip in tasks, allowing an individuals full potential to be reached. Neverthel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2011.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 367.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4795640327 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20487400643 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542234332425 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.0431779111 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.842105263 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3157894737 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94736842105 5.21951772744 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0890146380966 0.243740707755 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0304305617396 0.0831039109588 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0398428334888 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0672794465884 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340338270268 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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