The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The above statement claims that the best way for a nation or a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government , industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation and not competition. At first blush, this claim seems to be logically apt and there are perhaps many witnesses to the corrigibility of this assertion. Competition, however does not seem to verify the leadership qualities of an individual or society,aptly.
Firstly, it is important for an individual to ensure a well informed public interaction system as it helps in instilling a sense of confidence and soverignity in the individual himself. It also helps in developing an ability to convince others if one has a valid viewpoint. For instance, around the 1930s, through the mid 1940s, Hitler and Nazi had carried out several encounters which marked the occurence of the great Holocaust. Several Jews, Gypsys, homosexuals and other people were made victims of the genocide as they supposedly posed a threat to the Aryan race. This was clearly a result of lack of cooperation and understanding between the common people and Hitler and Nazi. Thus, Cooperation and interaction are essential for a well established government.
Secondly, Democracy also serves as a well carried out extrapolation of the claims of the main argument. For example, president Elanor roosevelt and Abraham Lincoln best exemplify the progress of the democratic government. A very sensational example would be of the Sir Martin Luther King Jr. who rose above all and cooperated with everyone in order to prove a consensus viewpoint to promulgate an idea that would benefit everyone. Additionally, the ban on women suffrage in some of the middle east countries has made those nations be categorised under third world nations and this is clearly due to lack of cooperation between the leaders and the common people.
However, it is true to a certain extent that competition also helps in instilling a sense of leadership in individuals and groups as it forces groups to thrive hard to be the best.For example, in a democratic country the various disparate political parties indulge in rallying in order to obtain votes to win the elections, but sometimes these practices take an improbable turn and lead to corruption and money laundering. the common man is easily made a fool in such cases.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, third, thus, well, for example, for instance, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1981.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 389.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09254498715 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00070230657 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565552699229 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.7996709688 60.3974514979 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.066666667 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9333333333 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.21951772744 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239603417387 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0740818435677 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115877947387 0.0758088955206 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143180066816 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0980834701352 0.0667264976115 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.