The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Today, the increasing population is a major problem in the world. there are limited job opportunities for the people. therefore, unemployment is an immense problem prevailing in current time. The children are told to compete with others to become successful in their life. this sense of competition limits the output of society because people are less likely to cooperate with other competitors. therefore, I agree with the statement.
Firstly, the competition is major factor in day to day life. people live in a fear that their competitors would eliminate them from the competition. From childhood to elder age, people compete for many different things like from confirming place in reputed college to getting higher position in cooperation. therefore, they are less likely to help their colleagues in their problems. many time people try to defame them for their own benefits. The students will not teach their classmates in their problems because they feel that helping them is waste of time, rather they should focus on themselves rather than their friends. For example, in the period of appraisal people in the cooperate world might try to defame their colleagues by spreading canards which will harm their reputation.
Moreover, if the people try to defame others or do not help them, this will increase the tension between the people working together. they might become hostile to each other and they will not help each other in their problems. this will directly effect to the productivity of the firm. The productivity will decrease and time consumed by the workers in completing the assigned work will increase. therefore, the profit of the company will suffer a blow. therefore, cooperation is a must needed attribute in the firms, else the firm will fall short in competing to their rival companies.
For example, a team cannot win a football match if there is no cooperation between them. football is a game of teamwork. if the team won't play with cooperation they will not be able to take ball to the opposite side of the pitch to score goal. they will pass the ball to each other but if there is no cooperation between them, the other player will not be able to retrieve the pass and the team will give possession of the ball to the rival team.
However, a healthy competition is necessary among the people. competition will push the people to try harder. without competition, the people will think that they are unreplaceable, therefore they will work according to their will. this will also undermine the productivity of the firm or industry. For example, if the government has no strong opposition party, they will pass any bills without any opposition. The government will more likely to become like communist rather than democratic. therefore, a healthy competition is also required.
To sum up this, a healthy competition is required to bring the best out of the people and increase productivity. but pros of instilling cooperation in them will increase productivity and the environment will become more affable than before. people will feel freedom in asking others help. this will increase the productivity of the people in the firm.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 30.0 12.4196629213 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2696.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 523.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15487571702 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75672991555 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432122370937 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 817.2 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.2370786517 168% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.179106079 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.2941176471 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3823529412 23.4991977007 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76470588235 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 30.0 7.80617977528 384% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 5.13820224719 253% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121634440639 0.243740707755 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0378408938613 0.0831039109588 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374217611192 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0726397015206 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0253674217818 0.0667264976115 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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