Leadership is vital to a society since it dictates how a society grows. Instilling the spirit of cooperation and teaching the youth how to be good leaders in industry government and other fields brings positive outcomes in future generations. Cooperation ensures smooth workflow in industries, peace and friendliness among governments and nations and encourages people to be team players.
As much as competition helps society realize high quality products in its industries, and prevents the rise of individual magnates dictating certain aspects of the economy leading to monopoly, competition also brings with it major challenges. Industrial competition leads to high price of products due to companies spending more money promoting there products. It also leads to specious and misleading advertisement in order to attract more customers.
Very often there are fierce competitions during election periods in third world nations. For example, in Kenya, presidential elections usually result to violence and killing of innocent people, especially those who oppose or protest against the incumbent regime. The competition for power leads to disunity among citizens due to bad politics and results to marginalization of certain communities whose leaders are not in high offices. Developed countries are non-exempt to this ordeal. For example in the United States, Presidential candidates very often rally support from states they identify with. The country tends to be torn apart as either democratic or republican supporters during the electioneering period. This sort of competition always makes people uncomfortable especially when they are around people who align themselves with different political groups.
In conclusion, The Society would thus benefit more from instilling virtues of cooperation teamwork and discipline to its youth as opposed to competition if they are to make sound reasonable and better leaders of the future.
- The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones. 66
- Colleges and universities should require all faculty to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach. 50
- Colleges and universities should require all faculty to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach. 66
- The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones. 66
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 68, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... competitions during election periods in third world nations. For example, in Ken...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, still, third, thus, for example, in conclusion, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.4196629213 8% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 33.0505617978 36% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1656.0 2235.4752809 74% => OK
No of words: 289.0 442.535393258 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.73010380623 5.05705443957 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03381879235 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615916955017 0.4932671777 125% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5308417682 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.285714286 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6428571429 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92857142857 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189647275056 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555475645248 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038950071892 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102508056579 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0189141731615 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 48.8420337079 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 12.1743820225 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.95 12.1639044944 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.26 8.38706741573 122% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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