The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Some people contend that promoting cooperation with others is a favorable attitude for young people developing leadership, while others argue that fostering a sense of competition is more desirable. There are valid arguments for each side and it is not a black or white choice to decide who is right. However, considering that the sense of unity promotes individual's efforts, I believe that instilling a sense of cooperation is more crucial.
The chief reason for my assertion relies in the notion that leaders are those who are responsible in letting everyone, no matter what disability they have, to be included as a member of a society. No one can live with integrity when feeling alone and left out. Look at the world where so many of the elderly, minorities and people with disabilities being left out. In a society where competition is focused, those people can only be engaged in certain jobs or may even have to completely rely on other's support. Gradually, their existence and their sufferings are being revealed through social media, and Shinzo Abe, the prime minister of Japan, has launched an initiative, namely "Participation of the 1,000 million people." This initiative consider the importance of including the whole population to be active in the society.
The importance of cooperation can be explained in the aspect of industry. People mostly work in team for any kinds of projects. In such cases, the team leaders are not supposed to be a dictator to be the winner of a competition. Rather, the team leader has the responsibility to supervise other member's work. If anyone is facing trouble, the leader will modify the tasks and put in additional support or give advice to improve the situation. Being a junior consultant working in team projects myself, I insist that young people are watching how leaders act, and they learn what leadership is from them.
A similar statement can be said in the case of cooperation in sports. I was in a gymnastics team in high school, and in fact gymnastics are performed individually. However, when we practice new acrobatic activity, we need support from other members to prevent any occurrence of injury during practice. At the competition, the team cheer for others and feel happy when others make accomplishments. The sense of unity is important to have enough confidence when it's your turn to perform alone in front of many people evaluating your performance.
In summary, as far as the importance of teamwork is concerned, I insist that the society should promote young people build the sense of cooperation so that individuals can live with integrity.
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- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree 79
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, may, so, still, while, in addition, in fact, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2202.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 435.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06206896552 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95277848466 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535632183908 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 711.9 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4215307406 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.1 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169038903954 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0530326736774 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478682419058 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101308805268 0.150359130593 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421237315664 0.0667264976115 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.