As the task says, there should be more co-operation amongst individuals who lead the government rather than having the desire of power and the motives of establishing one's place in a government through competitive measures. In my opinion, I mostly agree with the statement.This statement would be agreed on the basis of two major reasons.
History teaches humankind, stability in governance is one of the most important aspects of a particular territory. This entitles the concerned leaders of the government to encourage their subordinates to maintain harmony among the lower ranks. Research studies conducted by the most imminent economic institutions around the world have always betted on the fact that, a stable economy is inspired by a stable governance. One of the biggest examples of the importance of a stable economy would be the current situation of countries like Japan. Japan being one of smallest nations of the world, has constantly been at par with the development of technology, all thanks to it's stable government. Not only in Technology, but also in attributes like public transportation, their happiness index, Japan proves to be an exemplar to young developing nations worldwide. There would be little to no evidence of any instability within the Japanese administration since two decades. Right from the local administration in any city or town of Japan, to the government at the national capital, there has always been a sense of harmony prevailing along Japanese governance. Having a government where politicians are not too desirable of major control in any sector gives a sense of satisfaction to the citizens of the country about the proper functioning and the transparency among the representatives at power. However, if there is a scenario where the government has no competition, it could be possible that the overall development of the nation is negligible.
Nonetheless, there are some functionaries and establishments in a stable government that need some competition, in order to sustain and develop, day by day. For an instance, if we consider the example of countries like India, we won't see a stable government not facing any crisis of power or competition amongst itself. Countries like India, people vote individuals to power who only talk about the development of the economy, social stability and better infrastructure. So if, such government comes into power, then they are indebted towards their citizens in fulfilling their promises. If they fail to do so, come the next election, a new set of elected representatives are given this opportunity. In order to remain stable, in this case, there needs to be healthy competition among the different subsidiary components of the government to satisfy people with 'minimum government' and 'maximum governance'.
There have been various scenarios where governments have thrived in maintaining a stable economy and government, simultaneously encouraging people to strive towards the best in getting the best product of their work.With this not only the government burgeons, but also other factors like industrial development, happiness index remain at par without compromising the laws and the principles an institution works on.
- Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated. 66
- TOEFL T P O 08 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- Argument Topic: "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced 52
- It is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts. 73
- People who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards are poor decision makers.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the pos 89
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 274, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...nion, I mostly agree with the statement.This statement would be agreed on the basis ...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the smallest'.
Suggestion: of the smallest
...f countries like Japan. Japan being one of smallest nations of the world, has constantly be...
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Line 5, column 342, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on amongst itself. Countries like India, people vote individuals to power who onl...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: With
... getting the best product of their work.With this not only the government burgeons, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nonetheless, so, then, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 87.0 58.6224719101 148% => OK
Nominalization: 39.0 12.9106741573 302% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2716.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 505.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37821782178 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1870879583 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526732673267 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 873.0 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.0960229522 60.3974514979 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.947368421 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5789473684 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.15789473684 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0669253044807 0.243740707755 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0194163536076 0.0831039109588 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0225633587764 0.0758088955206 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0422035719054 0.150359130593 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287189711121 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 100.480337079 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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