The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation , not competition
A country depends on its young forces for the future development because it is today's youth that will grow into tomorrow's adults who will contribute to the nation. These are the people that will lead the country according to their capability. That is why, to make a generation capable of leading the country is a crucial factor. The prompt suggests that the young people should be prepared to do so with the help of cooperation but not with competition. I mostly agree with the prompt. The following passages demonstrate why.
First of all, working in a group is always fruitful. Because, in a group, there are other people and if someone fails at any task, there are always others to help them out. This sense of getting assistance from other members can be a motivating factor for a person. If someone is cooperated with any problem, he/she is likely to feel less pressured and can produce a good output. For example, if in a school, every child is given individual tasks, it might be burdensome for them. But, if they are organized in groups, they can work as a team and the mutual cooperation can help them feel that they are not alone and can always make something good out of it. So, this tells that a hint of cooperation can go a long way.
Secondly, competition does not always bring success. There are people who might get tired of competiting all along his/her life. In today's world, competition is everywhere. Starting from getting into a good school, a good college, into better jobs etc. If a person is continuously subjected to competition, his/her morale might fall apart. So, in this case, instead of giving someone's best effort, they are failing to give any effort. So, having competition always might not prove to be an effective tool to bring out the best in someone.
However, it is also true in some cases that having a little competition can prove good for the overall organization. If there is competition, then most of the people will try to prove their salt. This might just bring out the best in them and this might actually be helpful for the whole enterprise. Then again, this competition needs to be friendly, not too overimposing. There should be a sense of cooperation to motivate the people associated with the tasks. The feeling that there are people to cooperate with someone, to make their burden not feel like burden, can be very beneficial for a person.
In conclusion, young generation have tremendous capability of serving their nation. But, they should be let to do it in harmony. Although, a little competition is help the cause, it should be constructive and fun. This can help lead them any organization, even the country itself.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 377, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'someones the best'.
Suggestion: someones the best
...rt. So, in this case, instead of giving someones best effort, they are failing to give any ef...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2228.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 465.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79139784946 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66216581667 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470967741935 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.055330795 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.2666666667 118.986275619 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 23.4991977007 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13333333333 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237330686738 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591987094942 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482837241341 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129442700573 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569710643843 0.0667264976115 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 14.1392134831 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.8420337079 132% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.1743820225 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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