The best way for a society to prepare its young people leadership in government, industry, other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
This topic raises the controversial issue whether in young people competition should be instilled instead of cooperation because it promotes leadership among them specially in the areas such as government, industry and other field. I moderately agree with this issue as in the long run competition turns very fruitful rather a feeling of competition and feeling to outdo one other as further supported in industry, government and other fields.
First of all, a society is best run when young people are governed by a sense of cooperation rather than competition among people. I would like to point that business world best support this idea where big organisation are successful only when they are able to share their ideas, collaborate and work together. To illustrate further, let us look at the example of an organization, if it would solely run by a sense of competition than it would mitigate the productivity and thereby impacting the profits of the company. Moreover, in research areas key projects are successful only when goals are common, deadlines are adhered to and when there is a collaborative environment to support innovation and research. Consequently, it is pretty obvious that from big industries to research filed, a of cooperation leads it to great stardom rather than a feeling to outdo one other.
Furthermore, in field of politics if competition prevails, it undermines the objective of a democratic society and further leads to its own downfall. Specifically, look at the example of rule under great and undefeated ruler Adolf Hitler in Germany. His sense of competition and hegemony was the sole criterion that lead to its downfall when he tried to invade Russia after conquering most of the world. Had he created a strategic alliance and cooperated with his other allies; Japan and other it wouldn't have been the case and the history would have been different. It is clearly evident both from industry and political perspective that competition only serves to a nation's or person downfall in the long run.
Admittedly, in some areas like sales and entrepreneurship department competition turns out better than cooperation. This is true especially, when it comes to Sales as employer's promotion, salary and other perks comes only when he develops a feeling of competition among other employees and key leaders in this field. In addition, startups are successful only when there is competition among them and this is also true for key leaders who thrive on competition on the long run. However, such a strategy is ideal only in the short run, as increases sense of competition damages health of employees, create hatred, ego and an employee becomes self centre. Cooperation, however, unites the people, creates a feeling of brotherhood and unity and takes a nation, company and startups to great heights.
In conclusion, though, it necessary for a sense of competition among small business, startup in order for them to thrive in the real world, but in the long run it undermines the very objectives which it aims to achieve through competition. Hence, cooperation is better than competition as it leads to betterment of society wherein people work in harmony and leads to a successful society.
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- The best way for a society to prepare its young people leadership in government, industry, other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 66
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 12.9106741573 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2714.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 526.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15969581749 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9608201687 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480988593156 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 851.4 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8041910175 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.842105263 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6842105263 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42105263158 5.21951772744 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201700769771 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061416660024 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058800201598 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118984756573 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430116296543 0.0667264976115 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.1392134831 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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