The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Leadership is the most important quality, every young people must have to become successful in everthing they do. The prompt says, society must prepare young people for leadership in different fields, by building sense of cooperation and not competition. I strongly agree with this statement, stating two reasons.
To start with, leadership plays an important role, to achieve anything, in a group environment. Moreover, every leader in a group must have certain leadership qualities like bringing the group togeather, maintaining calm and healthy environment, motivating the people in the group and many other reasons. Leadership can be instilled in any individual by motivating them, with a sense of cooperation and building team work in the group. By building a cooperative environment, each one in the group helps each other, in different aspects and perspectives, share each one's opinion, stating "what is right" and "what is wrong".
To continue, building a sense of competition among people, to lead a team does not help the cause. Perhaps, by building an environment of competition in a group is dangerous, as it creates a cloud of competitiveness among the people. With this nature of competitiveness, people in a group, compete among each other to prove, they are the best to do a particular job, rather than helping each other by sharing information among them. To elucidate with an example, consider the field of playing cricket. Cricket is a team sport, where leadership plays a crucial role, in winning matches and tournaments. So, the leader or captain of the cricket team must build a positive and cooperative environment in the group, which uplifts the spirit of each and every player, helping each other in winning matches. On the contrary, if the captain build a competitive atmosphere among the group, then each player tends to compete among themselves, which in the process of competiting among them, makes them fail as a group, consequently, losing the match.
To conclude, I feel leadership in any government,industry or any other field must be instilled in such a way, where the leader creates a cooperative atmosphere among the group, instead of maintaning a competitive environment among the group. I end this, by saying that " Leadership will be successful, by instilling cooperative nature in the team (teamwork), than by creating competitiveness among them".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, moreover, so, still, then, i feel, on the contrary, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2048.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 383.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34725848564 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18796282623 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467362924282 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 616.5 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 4.38483146067 411% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0511291342 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.0 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9375 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1875 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19348495844 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0736596168993 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0817271840203 0.0758088955206 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140662676928 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689581710867 0.0667264976115 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.1392134831 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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