The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Over the years competition has just increased be it with increasing expectations from our ownselves or increased interaction through internet from the people around the world. The prompt suggests that society should prepare its young people for leadership by instilling in them sense of cooperation and not competition. I do not agree with this suggestion due to the following three reasons.
Firstly, the drive of getting ahead of everyone else, be it their peers or neighbour's kid, is what makes people become the best version of themselves. Specially amongst young people, this feeling of competition is what helps them out grow their expectations. For instance, few years ago in the city of Delhi schools, government had changed the scoring system from an all percentile based scoring system to a grading based system in an attempt to reduce stress and tackle growing unhealthy competition among students. Though this new system worked well in its purpose of improving overall mental health of the students and teachers altogether, but over the period of few years it has been observed that students from Delhi schoools have become less competent with respect to other states in the country and are slowing getting behind in the college enrollements, which is not helping either the schools or the teachers. Hence, competition is a big drive which helps people stay on top and grab the best opportunities.
Furthermore, some people may argue that team work and cooperation are essential to success for any organisation or individual. Though, it needs to be given more thought, that if an individual himself is not able to perform at the best of their capacity as they are too complacent in the current situation where they are. This also raises an important quetions as to why would someone have any further aspirations of betterment as most of the tasks get completed due to the mutual help and co-oporation. For example, if a young student is praised for a good score in mathematics and contributing to the overall class average. They will probably be dillusional about their performance looking at the overall average of the class, until they compare it to others who are performing way better as compared to them in most of the subjects. Therefore, depending too much on cooperation may lead to a laid back attitude over time and in turn will be more harmfull for growth for any country's youth.
Society that encourages competition has successfully created a lot of scientists who are currently at top because they always thrive to do better than others. Also, in current ever changing market scenario, it is essential to keep an eye on other new products before creating your own. Because even if you do not compete, but cosumers for those products will definately compare your products with others.
Though competition can quickly change from a blessing to a curse if not handled in a proper manner. Unhealthy competition is always harmfull , be it a young student or an employee working for an international corporation. Hence , it is extremely important for society to not get overly obsessed with constant comparing and should always encourage individuality.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
Over the years competition has just increased be it wi...
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Line 1, column 307, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing in them sense of cooperation and not competition. I do not agree with this su...
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Line 3, column 231, Rule ID: OUT_GROW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'outgrow'?
Suggestion: outgrow
...eling of competition is what helps them out grow their expectations. For instance, few y...
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Line 5, column 791, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...to others who are performing way better as compared to them in most of the subject...
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Line 8, column 81, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a proper manner" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...om a blessing to a curse if not handled in a proper manner. Unhealthy competition is always harmfu...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... for an international corporation. Hence , it is extremely important for society t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, so, still, therefore, well, as to, for example, for instance, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2658.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 522.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09195402299 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85157675794 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 215.323595506 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536398467433 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 810.0 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.9538955313 60.3974514979 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.9 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95 5.21951772744 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245094861744 0.243740707755 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751822597462 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754142199017 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128852639402 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411605744156 0.0667264976115 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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