The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sesnse of cooperation not competition

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sesnse of cooperation, not competition.

The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sesnse of cooperation, not competition. I believe this to be true, and I will explain my line of thought in the following paragraphs.

By definition, leadership means leading a set of people to achieve a desired aim. By leading what I mean is taking initiative, making steps to make the lives of people better. Leadership is like bring in the driver's seat in a vehicle. In that case, you're directing the affairs of your followers.

Naturally, everyone has the instinct to compete, it's inborn to desire to be better than someone else, however to be a good leader, such natural instinct must be done away with. Or at least, be drastically reduced.

For a society to blossom, it must train its young crop of leaders to become selfless and more cooperative amongst themselves. Without this, there would be trouble if they eventually get into power. This can be done effectively if the elderly ones mirror such virtues as cooperation amongst themselves and a desire to lift one another up.

There is a popular maxim that says "to be a good leader, you must be a good follower." This maxim underlies the notion that leaders are not made overnight. Gone are the days when rulers became rulers as a result of birth or family affiliation. In today's world, the principles of democracy and fair rule hold sway over the traditional means of governance.

The extent to which I agree with this statement is that when a society trains its young people to cooperate rather than compete, they would live to help one another whether its convenient for them or not, and this would help that society to blossom.

My most compelling reasons is that when you train up a child in the way he/she should go, he/she would not depart from it. So, when the young people are trained not to compete, but to cooperate with one another, it would help the society to blossom when they grow older.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: you're
...rivers seat in a vehicle. In that case, youre directing the affairs of your follower...
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Suggestion:
...hicle. In that case, youre directing the affairs of your followers. Naturally,...
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Line 9, column 172, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...at leaders are not made overnight. Gone are the days when rulers became rulers as a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, still, at least, i mean, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1679.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 353.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75637393768 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65934910205 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538243626062 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5653325572 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7647058824 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.41176470588 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277480538973 0.243740707755 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859008091232 0.0831039109588 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.16311515841 0.0758088955206 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145868693255 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.157852176279 0.0667264976115 237% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 100.480337079 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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