Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
No matter how hard the situation is - someone should not lose hope, she/he should not stop dreaming; dream is something that indeed help us to survive in thousands of obstacles in our life. Though I would like to say do not stop dreaming, I would also like to draw the importance of choosing a worthy goal or dream throughout this article.
First of all, I believe - people absolutely can do whatever they want to do in their lives; there is nothing that can stop them achieving them if they follow their hearts and stick to their plans. The importance of dreaming is no doubt a significant one in our life, but the importance of worthy goals should not be forgotten. Dreaming something does not mean someone should mix up and picked some imprudent goals. My own experience is a good example of this - one of my friends always wanted to serve our nation; even though he has completed his engineering degree with us, joining the military was his only dream during his whole life. After graduation, he tried hard to make that dream true, but after a certain period of time, he had somewhat lost his faith. Maybe it was some financial odds that force him changing the path. He started to work with us in a private firm with a handsome salary, however, that did not fulfill his desire, he was sad and often share his thoughts with us. One day I told him - there is nothing to be worried of, it is obvious we need money, but that does not mean we should not stop dreaming of becoming what we want. Just because you are in some financial burden does not mean you have to stop that dream of serving the nation. At that point, he told me that he was feeling selfishness chase that dream. I told him that if you would become the Captain of our military, your family would be the happiest one of this world, there is nothing to be felt selfishness, you rather take your time. Then he left the job, started for the preparation and after 6 months we heard the good news, he indeed becomes a Captain of our military, in the signal core (engineering section). However, my point is he was not selfish to follow his dream, and I do not think he was imprudent choosing that dream.
Secondly, at no point, people should worry about being failures if their goals are prudent and reasonable. Initially, they might be failures, but that does not preclude the possibilities of becoming the persons they always wanted to be. As I said earlier, my friend failed first time, but he did not stop to keep alive his dream. Though he was at some point, ambivalent, but he was able to become a Captain because he always believed that dream. From his experiences, I have learned that if someone's dream is not selfish and prudent they should not be worry of becoming failures. It is just a matter of time to become successful in our lives.
In conclusion, I would say people should always dream and that dream should be bigger enough that at no point that would seem like being selfish or irrational; It is us who will shape that dream into reality.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 716, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ke that dream true, but after a certain period of time, he had somewhat lost his faith. Maybe ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'in conclusion', 'no doubt', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.18137254902 0.240241500013 75% => OK
Verbs: 0.18954248366 0.157235817809 121% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0604575163399 0.0880659088768 69% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0588235294118 0.0497285424764 118% => OK
Pronouns: 0.125816993464 0.0444667217837 283% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.101307189542 0.12292977631 82% => OK
Participles: 0.0277777777778 0.0406280797675 68% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.38467329211 2.79330140395 85% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0261437908497 0.030933414821 85% => OK
Particles: 0.0016339869281 0.0016655270985 98% => OK
Determiners: 0.0702614379085 0.0997080785238 70% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.031045751634 0.0249443105267 124% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0130718954248 0.0148568991511 88% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3023.0 2732.02544248 111% => OK
No of words: 554.0 452.878318584 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45667870036 6.0361032391 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85151570047 4.58838876751 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.294223826715 0.366273622748 80% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.182310469314 0.280924506359 65% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.117328519856 0.200843997647 58% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.072202166065 0.132149295362 55% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38467329211 2.79330140395 85% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 219.290929204 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438628158845 0.48968727796 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.5182833682 55.4138127331 93% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6194690265 107% => OK
Sentence length: 25.1818181818 23.380412469 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.455749984 59.4972553346 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.409090909 141.124799967 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1818181818 23.380412469 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.590909090909 0.674092028746 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 43.4128651132 51.4728631049 84% => OK
Elegance: 0.829694323144 1.64882698954 50% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162210422248 0.391690518653 41% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0795748364015 0.123202303941 65% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.046894389748 0.077325440228 61% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.452349224982 0.547984918172 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.167682761609 0.149214159877 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690779037951 0.161403998019 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372375247501 0.0892212321368 42% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.424789270437 0.385218514788 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.1256265489 0.0692045440612 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116749106107 0.275328986314 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320127215421 0.0653680567796 49% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.4325221239 125% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.30420353982 132% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 7.22455752212 138% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 14.0 13.5995575221 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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