Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based
It has been claimed that even though young people are advised to follow their own dreams they should pick worthy goals because many people's dreams are selfish.
I do not particularly favour the claim made.Young people are often advised to follow their dreams. This should be unconditional enough for them to select their dreams according to their predilection.Young minds are the most innocuous and inspirational.They know exactly what they want to do. I am of a strong opinion that dreams and goals should be based on one's inherent interests and passions, irrespective of the measure of their worthiness.
For example if Michael Jackson had not followed his dreams of becoming a dancer. And would have just followed the path of a regular 9 to 5 job he would not have achieved the success he did following his passion and dreams.He would not have been remembered today as an incredible world famous dancer. If Sachin Tendulkar would have given up on his dream of becoming a star cricketer he would not have achieved the milestones and success he has achieved today.I think it is very important for individuals to follow their dreams irrespective of how worthy or unworthy their dreams appear to people. They say "The sky is the limit!" This is exactly what applies to our dreams too.
It has been stated that many people's dreams are selfish. Although this is not completely true.It might hold some truth for some people.For example some venal politicians have megalomania. They are not satisfied with what they have and don't keep the society's interest before their own.They use all their means of achieving their dreams by malpractices which in turn affect and pollute our society.Such selfish dreams are definitely not worthy and are in fact harmful for the society at large.So in such cases it is true that people should follow worthy goals and dreams. Dreams should enrich your own life also enhancing and ameliorating the lives of people around us.
To conclude I do not agree to the claim made that people should pick only worthy goals. As sometimes satiating self interests and working for your own happiness is an important pursuit of life. Following one's own passions and dreams only adds to the quality of life and success of an individual and boosts him in working towards his goal. But it is also true that dreams and goals should not be very selfish and self centered and should accrue towards improving and enhancing the society at large.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, for example, i think, in fact, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 416.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94711538462 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65234332449 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483173076923 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.9501921336 60.3974514979 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.625 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 7.80617977528 243% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267731822415 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108711033963 0.0831039109588 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.08338514526 0.0758088955206 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178429295211 0.150359130593 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0778681490764 0.0667264976115 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.