Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
The author claims that young people while they are following their dreams, they should place emphasis on dreams with worthy goals because many people dreams are for the benefit of them only. I strongly agree with the author and would further bolster my viewpoint in subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, the world is a better place today in terms of technology simply because the inventors had no selfish dreams. For example, the Wright brothers never had a dream to invent air mean of transportation for themselves and the Wright family only. Their was to provide a thing that can transport people from one place to another in the air. Which is what virtually everyone is using today in the world. Consequently, it is pretty obvious they had worthy goals.
Admittedly, picking a dream is that seem selfless can be daunting. This is true especially when it comes to academics. However, the above argument does not constitute a sufficient support to claim that.
In sum, as the author rightly claim young people should be advised to choose dreams with goals that every one can benefit from.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 349, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e from one place to another in the air. Which is what virtually everyone is using tod...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, while, as to, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 14.8657303371 13% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 58.6224719101 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 914.0 2235.4752809 41% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 185.0 442.535393258 42% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94054054054 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 4.55969084622 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48469971054 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 215.323595506 53% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621621621622 0.4932671777 126% => OK
syllable_count: 265.5 704.065955056 38% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8287657167 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0909090909 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8181818182 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27272727273 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223615337324 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719274628931 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714386031143 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129532501129 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491039713778 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 48.8420337079 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 12.1743820225 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 100.480337079 37% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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