Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
I do not agree with the author's claim that the financial need of all major cities should be fulfilled because in major cities the nations cultural traditions are engendered and preserved.Many countries have diverse culture, with different ethnic groups, different languages, different religions and different climates.In my ensuing paragraphs I will try to substantiate my stand.
Primarily, the country's cultural traditions are divided geographically. Many countries covering large geogrphical area has the highest possiblity of different cultutres in different regions.And in all that regions, there is always a major city which has prospered in terms of techonlogical, medical, educational & scientific advancements due to the natural resources its posess like huge water resource (river or sea coast), easy connectivity with other regions, hard-working peolpe etc. but the most crucial thing that leads to this advancements is the mindset of people in that city. People here are easly adaptive and susceptible to changes. They can easily forsake their previous practices and take up the new and beneficial practices in order to advance. They will adopt all the better ideas and cathartisize the old ones. They forgo their own culture and practices just to be more developed and advanced than others.
This is becoming a competition basically.Each city trying to be more and more developed whereas all the rural areas are left neglected. Also as the city grows bigger, it attracts more and more people from places and it becomes impossible to find any particular cultutre (it becomes a cosmopolitan city). No one cares about anyones culture in these major cities. People usually are so much engrossed in their own life and in pursuit of happiness (which is obviously money), that they hardly get time in preserving or generating their own culture.At some point of time obviously, culture must have generated there, but now due to all the technological advancements, its capacity to generate has depleted.
Subsequently, I would like to emphasize that having a museum which flaunts all the ancient items, depicting stories on the wall, etc can be called preserving of culture but that does not cost as much as major cities usually ask from Governments. As per the census in 2010 in USA it was observed that, the contribtution going to the preserving of old art and precious stones or items is the least. Cities are using the money for development of roads, electricity, new buildings, 5-star Hotels, Recreational Parks on the outskirts etc.Also if anyone visit the rural areas, they can find all the cultural traditions in one place, that too not behind a glass box; people here follow their own historical practices and not mesmerised by any advancements. For example, India has always been known as the most diversed country in the world. There are 362 official languages and more than 2000 dialects. There are sky rocketing Himalayas, a Thar desert, 4000 kms long sea coast, more than 20 major rivers etc.If you go to himalayan region, you will find the people in those villages are engaged in step farming or cultivation of tea, coffee etc while in plains, cultivation of wheat, rice, dal etc takes place. In coastal region you will find more developed cities, while in central region more of forests and villages can be observed. These differences create a divide between rural areas and urban areas. And all the rural areas have the cultural traditions intact and are never promoted due to lack of financing.
Finally I would like to conclude that governments should try to preserve these rural areas so that their greenery, their ethnicity, their language, their cultutre all remain untouched and unadulterated by the advancements which depreciates its distinct cultural identity.A nation's uniqueness is known by its cultural and biodiversity and so the financial support which the major cities require may be fulfilled in order for them to thrive but not for the reason that the cultural traditions are preserved and generated in major cities.
- In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn asmuch by watching television as they can by reading books. 83
- Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated. 62
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'whereas', 'while', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.236914600551 0.240241500013 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.148760330579 0.157235817809 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.133608815427 0.0880659088768 152% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0454545454545 0.0497285424764 91% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0440771349862 0.0444667217837 99% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0977961432507 0.12292977631 80% => OK
Participles: 0.0426997245179 0.0406280797675 105% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.90809287684 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0234159779614 0.030933414821 76% => OK
Particles: 0.00137741046832 0.0016655270985 83% => OK
Determiners: 0.0798898071625 0.0997080785238 80% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0192837465565 0.0249443105267 77% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00964187327824 0.0148568991511 65% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 4074.0 2732.02544248 149% => OK
No of words: 654.0 452.878318584 144% => OK
Chars per words: 6.22935779817 6.0361032391 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05701727356 4.58838876751 110% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.373088685015 0.366273622748 102% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.285932721713 0.280924506359 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.218654434251 0.200843997647 109% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.163608562691 0.132149295362 124% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90809287684 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Unique words: 334.0 219.290929204 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510703363914 0.48968727796 104% => OK
Word variations: 65.7370684572 55.4138127331 119% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6194690265 107% => OK
Sentence length: 29.7272727273 23.380412469 127% => OK
Sentence length SD: 138.186101907 59.4972553346 232% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 185.181818182 141.124799967 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7272727273 23.380412469 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.409090909091 0.674092028746 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.21349557522 307% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 58.3205448985 51.4728631049 113% => OK
Elegance: 1.5838150289 1.64882698954 96% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.481290194262 0.391690518653 123% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.119293284122 0.123202303941 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.078874401442 0.077325440228 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.48304604114 0.547984918172 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.211826578986 0.149214159877 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160554218797 0.161403998019 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0945253684677 0.0892212321368 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.421225462138 0.385218514788 109% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0376508092253 0.0692045440612 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.333436061798 0.275328986314 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0759630258171 0.0653680567796 116% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.4325221239 125% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88274336283 143% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 7.22455752212 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.70907079646 221% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.5995575221 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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