Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated
Government should exactly facilitate the financial support in major cities for their proper sustainment. Most of the people live in the major cities and it is the crucial place for economic and cultural development of the country. But it is not necessary that nation's cultural traditions are preserved and produced in the cities. So I am not fully convinced with the author's claim regarding his reason to state his position.
Culture and traditions are the identities of the nation and nationality. They constitute the important aspects of civilization and development in the nation since the early period. So their preservation is very important to preserve our identity and nationality. But it is not true these cultures are mainly preserved in cities. In times of modernization, people from different nation accumulate in city area and in that context; there is high chance of extinction of the old tradition and culture due to dominance of the foreign culture. For example; in major cities of developing country like Nepal, dresses of national identity like DAURA -SURWAL has been replaced by dresses like Coats, Tie, Pants due to westernization. Those old customs which are still the major dresses of population in remote areas are just worn by people in some rituals and festivals in city areas.
Cultural traditions are those which were handed to us by our forefathers. These remind us about our past and helps in the betterment of future. In the developed country, the author's claim might stand true. In developed country like USA, JAPAN, European Countries etc, vast majority of people live in developed cities and also people from foreign countries went there for job and settlement, sharing their own cultures and traditions. In this way, there is assimilation of culture which helps in generation of new cultural traditions. Special budget is allocated in those countries in order to preserve the old and new cultures. In developed cities, due to availability of resource and high awareness of people, culture and traditions are preserved and corrected in respect of time.
Many might argue that some of poorly developed countries like many African countries, we cannot find any developed cities and in some developing cities, they cannot allocate budget to preserve their cultural tradition. But in those countries, first of all, remote areas should be given priority. Majority of people live in the remote areas and culture and tradition are also born and preserved in pastoral region. So, government should bolster their financial status and allocate a substantial budget for their development.
In these ways, it is concluded that state should not only give priority to ensure financial condition of the cities area, but they should also underpin the economic condition and life style of rural area because rural areas are also the vast pool of cultural traditions where people struggle to preserve and continue those traditions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 435, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ring their own cultures and traditions. In this way, there is assimilation of cult...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun might seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much might', 'a good deal of might'.
Suggestion: Much might; A good deal of might
...ved and corrected in respect of time. Many might argue that some of poorly developed cou...
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Line 9, column 110, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cities'' or 'city's'?
Suggestion: cities'; city's
...ty to ensure financial condition of the cities area, but they should also underpin the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, so, still, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2483.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 474.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23839662447 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76267252611 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.440928270042 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 800.1 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.8957761023 60.3974514979 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.956521739 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6086956522 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321956119714 0.243740707755 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100399262464 0.0831039109588 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558520660164 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199488125506 0.150359130593 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062698974796 0.0667264976115 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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