Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
We are living in a era where everything is globally connected. Various culture comes in together to form a new one, so it become very hard to differentiate one country to another by culture. Where as cultural traditions are which discern a country from another, create their uniqueness as a nation. Therefore government should support financially to preserve cultural traditions; I agree this part with author, even though author raises few questions by his claim and reason. The first question is, whether only major cities must receive fund? And the second question is, are major cities that primarily preserve cultural traditions? Answer to the second question, will help to figure out the answer of the first one, is big cities are the representative of the nation but it is the villages and small towns where the culture is practiced. So the first question, villages and small towns should be the one to ensure financial support to keep the cultural traditions in practice. Thus the part that indicates receiving fund to major cities only would be an abortive try to preserve cultural traditions.
Major cities are base of the modern and advanced society of a nation, these are the constructive force that helps to build the nation. These cities represent the country to the world, thus they make the cultural tradition known to the world. However villages where these traditions originated, where these culture being practiced. Therefore, villages and small towns where government should focus their attention to. Origin area of culture should get equal financial support as major cities if not more. Cultural tradition practiced here in these places are purer than in cities, where culture from different nation mixed together and make archaic culture of the nation adulterate. Thus government should influence villages and small towns to preserve the culture and their unique existence.
Hong Kong is one of the major city in China. It is a financial center of Asia and also shopping hub of the continent. People from various country travel here for different purposes; thus, makes Hong Kong a hub of multi culture. There is no way to figure out that Hong Kong was a place where earn their lively hood by fishing around 150 years ago. The culture of Hong Kong diminish with time, become a modern city. This city represent China to the world, however it can not present the origin of China, their very own culture stays in the villages where most people are farmers. This example serves the idea that major cities not the only place where cultural traditions are preserved, rather small villages throughout country are the origin of culture.
To conclude, government should look into both cities where culture will be represented globally and villages where culture is originated and practiced. Since, government needs to balance the financial support so that city can represent the culture and the villages will be influenced to practice culture.
- Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. 16
- Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated. 50
- Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in orderto thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved andgenerated. 50
- Scandals-whether in politics, academia, or other area-can be useful. They focus our attention onproblems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. 16
- Claim: In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years.Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership. 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
We are living in a era where everything is globally connec...
^
Line 1, column 123, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
...es in together to form a new one, so it become very hard to differentiate one country ...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 192, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Whereas'?
Suggestion: Whereas
...iate one country to another by culture. Where as cultural traditions are which discern a...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 262, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re which discern a country from another, create their uniqueness as a nation. The...
^^
Line 1, column 301, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
..., create their uniqueness as a nation. Therefore government should support financially t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 573, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eceive fund? And the second question is, are major cities that primarily preserve...
^^
Line 1, column 982, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ep the cultural traditions in practice. Thus the part that indicates receiving fund ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 243, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... cultural tradition known to the world. However villages where these traditions origina...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 683, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...chaic culture of the nation adulterate. Thus government should influence villages an...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.253759398496 0.240241500013 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.157894736842 0.157235817809 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.101503759398 0.0880659088768 115% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0488721804511 0.0497285424764 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0244360902256 0.0444667217837 55% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0827067669173 0.12292977631 67% => OK
Participles: 0.0263157894737 0.0406280797675 65% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.53322779575 2.79330140395 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0375939849624 0.030933414821 122% => OK
Particles: 0.00375939849624 0.0016655270985 226% => OK
Determiners: 0.107142857143 0.0997080785238 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0244360902256 0.0249443105267 98% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0300751879699 0.0148568991511 202% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2962.0 2732.02544248 108% => OK
No of words: 485.0 452.878318584 107% => OK
Chars per words: 6.10721649485 6.0361032391 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.58838876751 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.387628865979 0.366273622748 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.278350515464 0.280924506359 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.19381443299 0.200843997647 96% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.115463917526 0.132149295362 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53322779575 2.79330140395 91% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 219.290929204 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432989690722 0.48968727796 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 48.7158094329 55.4138127331 88% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6194690265 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.4 23.380412469 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3721452187 59.4972553346 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.48 141.124799967 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 23.380412469 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4 0.674092028746 59% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.21349557522 173% => OK
Readability: 47.2350515464 51.4728631049 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.56910569106 1.64882698954 95% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386092011761 0.391690518653 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.146961159346 0.123202303941 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.102566915901 0.077325440228 133% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.476426090377 0.547984918172 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.155581890828 0.149214159877 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145366920427 0.161403998019 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081912838779 0.0892212321368 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.439110710521 0.385218514788 114% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.105309158582 0.0692045440612 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271379925892 0.275328986314 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891950034368 0.0653680567796 136% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.4325221239 77% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.30420353982 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.88274336283 328% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 15.0 2.70907079646 554% => Less neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 23.0 13.5995575221 169% => OK
---------------------
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations to cover all aspects.