College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
it is being stated that students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of occupations in that field. however, this statement could be true for some students but not for all.
Admittedly, for some people, the purpose of study is to use the knowledge to find a job and make money in the future. Nowadays, more and more organizations that make career suggestions collecting data from various businesses from different fields and use those data to project how well are those businesses are going to be in the future; more successful a business is, more likely it is going to expand its size and demand more employees. those organizations then publish articles recommending students about which fields to study based on the prediction that they made. Recently, many suggests college students to take statistics and mathematics as majors.
however, no one can precisely predict the availability of jobs in a specific field in the future. who knows what’s going to happen, who can say that there will not be another great depression when those current college students are graduated? Moreover, some students prefer to select something that they truly love as their fields of study. An old saying goes that passion leads to success. when a person is interested in something from the bottom of his heart, he will devote everything into it to make a satisfying work. Futhermore, when somebody is forced to do things they resist doing, it will always lead to a negative result. For example. if a student is so passionate about art but due to the consideration about job availability in the art field, he has no choice but to study chemistry. Everyday he spends time reading articles that he doesn't even understand and struggling with the chemical formulas. is this the ideal study environment that a college suppose to create for students. In my opinion, the answer is definitely a no. college should be a place where everyone can enjoy their daily campus life where they can freely pursue things they like and it should be a place where students can harness their skills that they wish to develop. Thus, the availability of jobs in certain field should not be the only factor that is taken into consideration making choice for field of study.
In conclusion, college is an important period of time of a person’s life. What to study during college is not an easy decision to make. however, even though whether pursing certain field could provide a decent job opportunity should also be evaluated, it should not be the only factor that one concerns about.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2185.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 438.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98858447489 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71403095274 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497716894977 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.9802540221 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.047619048 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8571428571 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61904761905 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284221089938 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841111230254 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0914258266694 0.0758088955206 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18978666189 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.06221542971 0.0667264976115 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.