To choose a profession is always a tough decision. Most 17-year-olds struggle to find the path that best matches their passions, interest, and desires. From that perspective, it is almost impossible to reason what kind of obstacles one will face in the future. At a young age, it is quite easy to foster sweet dreams filled with illusions, only to see them crushed by the weight of the world. Not only it looks scary, but it is scary. Therefore, educational institutions must use the best of their knowledge to assist teenagers to find a path that suits them as well as keeping them from other paths that will probably lead to failure.
Generally speaking, the majority of people do not have a unique talent, something that will make them stand out in the crowd. They are a product of circumstances. A significant number of people will choose a profession not because it fulfills their deepest desire to build a meaningful legacy or whatever, but rather because they have to be someone for the sake of being someone. Modern capitalist society imposes that behavior, which is not bad; however, many people misconstrue the true meaning and impact of a career. They often select one based on flawed assumptions, such as "as a doctor, I will make a lot of money" or "I will become a plane pilot because I will travel all around the world." Nothing could be further from the truth if the individual fails to manage the plethora of troubles inherent to their occupation. Therefore, colleges should act to avoid that.
On the other hand, not all talents flourish at an early age. For example, J.K. Rowling wrote and published the first volume of Harry Potter after 40 years of age. How would it be if she was discouraged from pursuing a literary career by her school advisor? The same can be argued about Coronel Sanders, the founder of the food chain restaurants called KFC. After failing in a variety of business before his first success, Mr. Sanders opened his first store in his 60s. Would have him become a successful entrepreneur if someone possessing authority told him at a young age that he could never become a restaurant owner and thrive? Thus, it is reasonable to conclude that dissuading a person of a specific field implies a dangerous responsibility.
Incredible talents can be condemned to eternal mediocrity just because of a failing assessment performed by an educator that was not in a favorable mood. Although that is a real threat, committed educators could use the best of their experience to show a freshman the cruel reality of the world in which they live to avoid them make stupid decisions. Time is an invaluable asset. Once it is gone, it is gone. The lifespan of a human being is much shorter than it seems. Most people cannot afford wrong decisions regarding their careers because time is relentless and unstoppable.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 529, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'possesses'.
Suggestion: possesses
...me a successful entrepreneur if someone possessing authority told him at a young age that ...
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Line 7, column 497, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to wrong'
Suggestion: to wrong
...han it seems. Most people cannot afford wrong decisions regarding their careers becau...
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Line 7, column 581, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...use time is relentless and unstoppable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, kind of, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2385.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 490.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86734693878 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73262257836 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573469387755 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 68.1959060355 60.3974514979 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126406356695 0.243740707755 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0280773436044 0.0831039109588 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0340773838558 0.0758088955206 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0674369978335 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00840048964086 0.0667264976115 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 100.480337079 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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