Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
As people have more ways to obtain knowledge and make a living, many disparage formal education, understood as the education one receives in conventional schools, because of its restrictiveness. While there are currently many barriers to fulfilling and satisfactory self-development, I subscribe to the notion that formal education is still the best path toward success.
First and foremost, formal education is still the most straightforward method to obtain the prerequisite knowledge for technical or academic jobs, which are the most promising fields. Not everyone will aspire to become a scientist or an engineer, but only through learning in school can they develop the mindset and discipline necessary for such jobs. Technical or academic jobs can lead to more self-development, because they require people to challenge themselves and further their knowledge. Discipline does not have to mean restrictive, and people will have more freedom to discover and choose their life's calling through formal education. One can be intimidated by the seemingly shrinking job market, however, and decides to turn toward trades that can immediately return their time and financial investment. But upon closer inspection, it is clear that technology is on the way to replace most manual tasks that used to require humans, and it is an irreversible trend. As an analogy, it is much more efficient to prepare for the rise of internal combustion engine than to make a faster horse carriage. Trade schools may seem like a great choice that leads to lucrative jobs, but it is only in the short term.
Additionally, many issues people have with formal education do not come from the education itself, but from their circumstances. Inadequate facilities and limited funding can turn many people off. However, within an area, the median salary of those who have a university degree will, for the most part, outmatch those without one. The socioeconomic problems of a region affect most aspects of life within it, and unless one has the mental and financial preparation to seek employment in a different area, striving for a diploma is still the worthiest investment. It is tempting, in a less than ideal environment, to think of all the famous people who became successful without a formal degree. From Bill gates to Einstein, the brightest and most successful seem to scorn formal education. Statistically speaking, those are the outliers; it is not that they depreciated formal education, but the learning environment of the time simply was no longer conducive to their development. As such, for the majority of people, having a formal degree contributes to a more stable career.
In conclusion, despite its drawbacks, formal education remains a trustworthy path to good jobs and self-development. The education system of the world at large is far from perfect, but instead of withdrawing from it, the best course of action is to focus on fixing its problems, simply because the general population still does not have the preparation to move onto more unconventional methods of reliable education.
- Do you think consumers should avoid over-packaged products or it is the responsibility of the producer to avoid extra packaging of products? Give your views or any relevant example with your own experience. 77
- Extreme sports like skiing, rafting, diving should be banned. Agree or disagree? 72
- Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and 60
- Extreme sports like skiing, rafting, diving should be banned. Agree or disagree? 77
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, still, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2604.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 497.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23943661972 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95397862911 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513078470825 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 818.1 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.77640449438 563% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1021281357 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.2 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.85 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.05 5.21951772744 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0858939285173 0.243740707755 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0290771068409 0.0831039109588 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0258820889363 0.0758088955206 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0540437974452 0.150359130593 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.014638200703 0.0667264976115 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.1392134831 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
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Rates: 64.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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