Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Every contry’s government needs to fund it’s cultural strong points in order for them to be more developed.While in the promt it is stated that they need to financially help only the major cities , my opinion is different.I believe that ,even though most of them have the largest population and are more famous , the smaller towns are way more rich in culture and they need the biggest help in order for their traditions to be preserved and recognized.
To begin with , most of the villages have some amazing features which have not yet been discovered due to the fact that the government is focused only on commercial attention which comes from big cities.For example ,most of them have a specific dialect which is different from the other parts of the country.These languages are almost extinct because more and more people are leaving these rural places to move in to more urban areas.For instance , in Albania there is a small village whose inhabitants have been living there for centuries , isolated from the cosmopolitan areas ,and whose dialect has not changed a single bit in almost 500 years. When their population was found by chance decades ago , everybody was shocked to learn the way their ancestors communicated. Later on , the government funded this new finding and now this language is being protected by UNESCO and even coming generations will be able to recognize this wonderful cultural asset. Had the government not funded this discovery , this language would have never gotten the attention it deserved , or even worse, disappeared.
Moreover, countryside’s landscapes , subjectively speaking, are more attractive than some giant skyscrapers who look the same ,and streets full of smog which are present in commercial major cities like New York. In a poll done lately by “Times” more than 70 percent of people liked to spend their free time in places filled with fresh air , as far away from accoustic pollution as possible. They were also interested in visiting old archeological sites , lakes and forests .These types of leisure activities are mostly offered in smaller towns and villages away from the main cities.If the government is aware of such polls and invests in said areas , their economy would grow enormously because of the interest the people have in such places.
Some believe that only the cities deserve funding from the state because they have a larger population and more imporatant institutions.While that is not incorrect and I agree that these said cities deserve the government’s funding , I believe that they do not need it more than smaller ones.I think that the cultural richness and the undiscoverd assets make villages very worthy for the states recognition and attention.
- Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.Write a response in which you discuss the ext
- Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.Write a response in which you discuss the ext 83
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2309.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 444.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20045045045 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89895245972 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542792792793 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.2370786517 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 49.0 23.0359550562 213% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 168.372016091 60.3974514979 279% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 256.555555556 118.986275619 216% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 49.3333333333 23.4991977007 210% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 9.55555555556 5.21951772744 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 31.0 7.80617977528 397% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159395149442 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672501445616 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597922320786 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116218733935 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607979842943 0.0667264976115 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.7 14.1392134831 196% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 21.74 48.8420337079 45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.4 12.1743820225 184% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.77 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.87 8.38706741573 118% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 11.8971910112 240% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 21.6 11.2143820225 193% => OK
text_standard: 22.0 11.7820224719 187% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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