Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Every country’s government needs to fund it’s cultural strong points in order for them to be more developed. While in the prompt it is stated that they need to financially help only the major cities, my opinion is different. I believe that, even though most of them have the largest population and are more famous, the smaller towns are way more rich in culture and they need the biggest help in order for their traditions to be preserved and recognized.
To begin with, most of the villages have some amazing features which have not yet been discovered due to the fact that the government is focused only on commercial attention which comes from big cities. For example, most of them have a specific dialect which is different from the other parts of the country. These languages are almost extinct because more and more people are leaving these rural places to move in to more urban areas. For instance, in Albania there is a small village whose inhabitants have been living there for centuries, isolated from the cosmopolitan areas, and whose dialect has not changed a single bit in almost 500 years. When their population was found by chance decades ago, everybody was shocked to learn the way their ancestors communicated. Later on, the government funded this new finding and now this language is being protected by UNESCO and even future generations will be able to recognize this wonderful cultural asset. Had the government not funded this discovery, this language would have never gotten the attention it deserved, or even worse, disappeared.
Moreover, countryside’s landscapes, subjectively speaking, are more attractive than some giant skyscrapers who look the same, and streets full of smog which are present in commercial major cities. In an poll done lately by “Times” more than 70 percent of people liked to spend their free time in places filled with fresh air, as far away from acoustic pollution as possible. They were also interested in visiting old archeological sites, lakes and forests. These types of leisure activities are mostly offered in smaller towns and villages away from the main cities. If the government is aware of such polls and invests in said areas, their economy would grow enormously because of the interest the people have in such places.
Some believe that only the cities deserve funding from the state because they have a larger population and more important institutions. While that is not incorrect and I agree that these said cities deserve the government’s funding, I believe that they do not need it more than smaller ones. I think that the cultural richness and the undiscovered assets make villages very worthy of states recognition and attention.
- Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.Write a response in which you discuss the ext
- Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.Write a response in which you discuss the ext 83
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 207, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... present in commercial major cities. In an poll done lately by 'Times' m...
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Line 13, column 43, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to fund'.
Suggestion: to fund
...me believe that only the cities deserve funding from the state because they have a larg...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2296.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 448.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.125 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7721417011 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537946428571 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4892519177 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.555555556 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8888888889 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146176865453 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489307714174 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411321474369 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103417755846 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516913871017 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.