Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military
The statement provided for discussion is that 'Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military'. To agree or disagree with this statement there are a number of pointers that need to be understood in depth. First, what is the form of investment that we are considering here. Second, what are the varied resources available to the Government to make this investment. Third, what are the different areas in which the Government can make investments. Fourth, what all is considered inclusive of arts and military in the context stated by the author.
There are various areas in which a Government provides support and makes investments for its country such as Arts, Science, Human development, Military, Technology, Aeronautics, Medical capabilities etc. The Government has different advisory groups that come up with various initiatives to make strides in a particular area. These ideas and initiatives are then discussed in multiple sessions and based on the priorities, available resources and budgets the Government allocates a fixed amount for every area for a particular number of years. The investment made by the Government can be in different ways such as capital allocation, resource allocation such as permission to perform a particular activity, support in the form of advisory and so on.
When we consider Arts as a individual area, it can encompass a wide variety of elements. Arts could include preserving and promotion cultural elements and art forms such as music, paintings etc, redevelopment and maintenance of museums and monuments of historic significance, inclusion of cultural heritage in school curriculum, financial support to artists and small businesses or support for development of new art forms. Investment in arts is extremely important for a country for various reasons such as it leads to the economic growth of a country, allows a country to retain its cultural diversity while also becoming a part of a globalized world.
Military development on the other hand is extremely crucial to save a country, its people and its economy. Military development includes training of the military forces such as the armed forces, naval forces, intelligence and investment in missiles and other warfare armour. A country has to develop its military forces on an ongoing basis as it can never predict when and how it might be attacked and would have to save it self.
Although I agree that a good amount of investment needs to be done in the arts for any country, I do not believe that it should be eating from the resources allocated to development of military forces. The Government needs to allocate budgets and resources in a efficient manner to ensure that all areas are well developed and that the the country functions in a smooth manner.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, then, third, well, while, as to, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2341.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 456.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13377192982 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9567641788 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480263157895 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 749.7 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.1650123866 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.055555556 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88888888889 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318140603808 0.243740707755 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103290995021 0.0831039109588 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122390279869 0.0758088955206 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174092517342 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0910410027994 0.0667264976115 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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