Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Securing one's country in this ever-competing world is one of the most crucial roles of the government. Right from protecting the borders of the country to maintaining peace inside the country, it is the government's responsibility to help the country flourish. However, the author suggests that governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military. I strongly disagree with the statement made by the author since securing a country is far more important than promoting art.
To begin with, as neighboring countries have been increasing their military power, it threatens each country to have an equal or greater hold on their military force. If a country is well secured on its borders, the citizens of the country would be able to live a peaceful life, therefore helping them to continue their goals and in turn, contributing to the uplifting of the country. For instance, countries like Pakistan which are known for the terrorists that reside in them, the neighboring countries like India, UAE, etc. need to have a strong military situated on their borders because if these terrorists infiltrate the country, it would be deleterious for the working of the country. Furthermore, they could even harm the government property due to which the expenditure of the government would increase. Therefore in order to maintain peace throughout the country, promoting the military would be far more effective than investing in arts, as art would not directly help in the existence of the country.
In addition to this, a strong military force would always help maintain order throughout the country. As the government invests more in the military, the police force would also be affected greatly providing them more stability. This would in turn enforce a stringent rule for the citizens and avoid them from committing crimes. Since the crime rate would decrease, it would surely benefit the country and help the citizens develop a sense of safety that would help them grow in the country itself. For example, many of the citizens move to other countries because they do not feel safe in their own countries. If the government can provide this safety to the citizens, it would definitely encourage the citizens to stay in their own country and contribute to the development of the country.
However, some may argue that a developed art can attract tourism that can help the government in revenue. But the question arises that whether tourism or the safety of the people is important? Art would help the country to get popular in the world and also may attract a myriad amount of tourists, but if the government is not able to protect these tourists itself, would the rate of this tourism increase? The rate of tourism would gradually decrease because the tourist would not be safe while visiting the country. Therefore though the government should invest in art too, the amount invested in the military should be greater since the safety of the citizens and tourists is far more important.
To conclude, the government plays a fundamental role in deciding the country's future development, and considering the overall development of the country, it is very critical to create a sense of safety and shelter among the citizens. This can be only done if the citizens feel safe in their country, hence the government should invest more in the military and develop effective advances in it that would help the country flourish.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
Securing ones country in this ever-competing world is...
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Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...ing peace inside the country, it is the governments responsibility to help the country flou...
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Line 3, column 814, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...iture of the government would increase. Therefore in order to maintain peace throughout t...
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Line 7, column 519, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...not be safe while visiting the country. Therefore though the government should invest in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 29.0 12.4196629213 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2873.0 2235.4752809 129% => OK
No of words: 571.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03152364273 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88831323574 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70369565937 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.408056042032 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 886.5 704.065955056 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2660910111 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.913043478 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8260869565 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65217391304 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248416568016 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0931484367429 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13449185257 0.0758088955206 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167887869907 0.150359130593 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0600137598261 0.0667264976115 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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