Issue Topic
Claim: Restaurants should be required to display nutritional information about the food they serve.
Reason: This knowledge will help diners make healthy choices and reduce their risk of diet-related health problems.
It is noticeable that the attention to the food averts to its healthy instead of keep pursuing creamy, delicious, and oily. While many people started paying attention to the risk of food, the danger of becoming illness doesn’t depend on its nutrition. Therefore, the reason given by the author is kind, but the claim delivered from the reason is far away from convincing. Despite the care of food risk and healthy issue related to diners, the commercial will tout their products nutritious and well-being which attribute to its economic impetus. The care to the customers to eat healthier comes from mark their ingredients and risk it containing instead the opposite. By doing this, customers can clearly understand what risk included when they enjoying a meal.
Without doubt, we are living in an era full of risk, from the air, soil, water, to food, every factor can be detrimental to our health. For example, cold coca-cola become popular and unavoidable soda choice no matter in summer or winner, but the high percentage of sugar is a critical reason that leads to obese and diabetes. Although its high sugar ingredients and caffeine are the resources that provide a happy moment for drinking it, the high health risk never mentioned on its red, passion bottle. Instead, people tend to drink it more when they feel hot, cheerful, sad, and sorrow. The commercial of the coca-cola and its bottle always marked by its effect of killing boredom, bringing cool moment, and its happiness atmosphere. The ingredients are CO2, and sugar, and syrup which mostly are daily elements of our foods. Thus, marking nutrition of the product cannot help the public to judge, conversely, it misleads the public to eat more.
Listing nutrition of the product could be a way for the company to avoid their responsibilities when their food harm to customers. As a producer, the restaurant knows much more clearly than customers about their recipe and secretes in it. Take a fried potato, such as, potato and oil are full of calories, which is good to generate energy for the human body. However, fried potato also contains very high additives spices which harmful to the human body. If the company only display nutrition information to customers. They can easily disguise customers that they are selling nothing but healthy and great food. The high calories, fatty, but low protein lead to a series of health risk, which only can be customers’ responsibility. The outcome can be quite opposite to the author’s kind intention.
Therefore, to lower the food risk, the restaurant should inform the customers not only their foods’ nutrition, more importantly, but they should also warn the customers the risk their food has.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2287.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 450.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08222222222 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67000624219 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542222222222 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6745215469 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 103.954545455 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4545454545 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09090909091 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253901921246 0.243740707755 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706826892482 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606154028252 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168434259951 0.150359130593 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544782165397 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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