The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The luxuries of contemporary life do not prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals, but rather open up more options for them to be independent than there were available to them before these modern conveniences.
The many conveniences we possess in this day and age makes our lives much easier, which can be viewed synonymously with laziness. For example, one may argue that people nowadays have their heads in their phones at all times, looking like unsocial zombies. However, our phones allow us to interact with each other in a more complex way. We have the entire internet in the palm of our hands, and we have access to new information at the tap of a fingertip. There is no need for digging through encyclopedias for hours to find the answer to a simple question. This feature allows us to expand our horizons faster and more easily than ever before. We are able to expose ourselves to new and broader point of views and interact with other minds, different and alike. We are also able to share our own views to the masses at any given time. Thus, these conveniences further facilitate our individual thinking and allow us to be social beings in a different manner.
Not only do the many luxuries we have help us to broaden our horizons, but they also save us a plethora of time. Even just a few years ago, we would spend unnecessary amounts of our precious time on little things, such as trying to map out our destinations before a trip, or cleaning our livings rooms. Now we have the gps that takes us straight to our destination, and rumbas that clean our floors without us having to exert any energy, allowing us to allott this extra time we gain to other more important things, like learning.
Rather than prevent individuality, I would argue that the conveniences we now have actually allow us to become even more creative. For example, in the world of art, the many new technologies of the modern age allow artists to branch out like never before. Digital media, music, photography, and film all benefit from technology, not only making it easier to create certain forms of art, but also providing new challenges. How do we make new noises and feelings for songs? How do we make more realistic animations? Years ago, people thought that what we had at the time was all we would ever have. Now, with the software and coding that have been developed, there is an endless amount of possibilities for us to explore.
In conclusion, although it may seem like the luxuries we have in contemporary life make our lives easier, these luxuries allow us to take our focus off the things in life that don’t require as much attention, such as cleaning and reaching our destinations, and shift this time and mental energy to new possibilities, thus facilitating our creativity and individuality.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a different manner" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...inking and allow us to be social beings in a different manner. Not only do the many luxuries we...
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'allowed'.
Suggestion: allowed
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, look, may, so, thus, as for, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 65.0 33.0505617978 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2365.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 492.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80691056911 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69814298058 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510162601626 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 754.2 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.1703197452 60.3974514979 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.619047619 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0891083712704 0.243740707755 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0298526290678 0.0831039109588 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541904638598 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0806905784843 0.150359130593 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0864425412612 0.0667264976115 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.